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    Mei-Chi

    [8642]Nov 6, 2008
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    I remembered my charcters name..

    Samei

    Water Bending Assassin

    Forgot where I left off,so, I am gonna start anew

    ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////

    Guardian

    Episode One:

    Swords of No Names

    A silent breeze blew as the sun set. Samei was sitting near a camp fire next to a river. The flames danced to the winds gentle melody, and the sparks floated away, flying up to meet the clouds. Samei wrapped her arms around her knees and rested her chin as she watched the sun go down. It's colors were so peaceful, that she forgot about the war that raged around her, and just thought aout how it used to be. She thought back to the stories that her master told her.

    She thought about the peace between the 4 elements. Than a thought came to her head The elements are at peace, just not the nations. She turned to her tent, suddenly missing home. Putting out the fire, she walked slowly to her tent. " Most people prefer the town's tavern to a tent.". Samei turned reaching for her sword. There was a old lady behind her. White hair was tied into a bun on the top of her head. Her eyes were the shade of the river, she wore a blue Komono. "What are the names of your swords?" asked the old lady.

    Samei looked at her swords, she had never thought of naming them. Many stories were told about great warriors who swords were named to put fear in an opponent. "They have no name, what is yours?" the lady responded with a smile " My name is Adurna, I am the guard of the river town..." she pulled two swords from her belt "... and these are Guardian and Protector". Samei thought for a second," My name is Samei, and these are the swords without names, great guardian of the river town, can you help me name my swords?". Adurna's smile brightened. She replied "Come on, there is sword naming to be done" she said turning. Samei ran to follow

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    Mei-Chi

    [8643]Nov 6, 2008
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    It messed up my post!
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    Double09nhalf

    [8644]Nov 6, 2008
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    Mei-Chi wrote:
    It messed up my post!

    looked good to me. Little short but then again I can't post anything until me laptop gets fixed.

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    Spazdog

    [8645]Nov 6, 2008
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    Double09nhalf wrote:

    Mei-Chi wrote:
    It messed up my post!

    looked good to me. Little short but then again I can't post anything until me laptop gets fixed.

    agreed.

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    ThatLostGuy

    [8646]Nov 6, 2008
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    *wonders what Dafoose thinks of my two posts*
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    Dafoose

    [8647]Nov 6, 2008
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    ThatLostGuy wrote:
    *wonders what Dafoose thinks of my two posts*

    your last two posts Or your last two stories? Either of which, I'll get right on it, I only read the stories for that page the day I said I'd read the stories, I guess I forgot about the other page behind it.

    *Goes back 4 pages to read TLG's Post since he mentions it now.*

    Ohhhh...I remember reading those stories: Post one: TLG you're stories have more pop culture references than a JC Penny Summer Catalogue.

    I know it's your way of writing, but "Boy Scouts" and "Burn baby burn"?!! I remember mentioning this before, lol.

    I thought it was interesting that you included so many flashbacks in your second post. (here comes my second joke) Did you happen to be the one screenwriting for naruto?

    Lol, jk, that was a bad joke.

    Anyway, i do remember commenting on your second one, even though I didn't say much. I just said, "TLG is the eliminator of characters".

    Other than that, your writing isn't bad, it reads good, it's just the mood you set for your characters is strange sometimes, and it's hard to understand the feelings that you are trying to portray with the dialogue when you say things like, "Boy Scout" and "burn baby burn".

    Things like insanity come from that. Lol. nah, I'm being serious about that one.

    I'm sorry, I'm just a terribly rude person today, I can't help myself.

    Edited on 11/06/2008 9:45pm
    Edited 2 total times.
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    confucioussayhi

    [8648]Nov 7, 2008
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    Rude? Who lied to you about the meaning of rude?

    TLG, your stories suck. They're poorly written, immature, nonsensical trash. I spit on you. What the hell kinda name is Willy Woo anyway?

    That's how you do it.
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    BaiMaoRieji

    [8649]Nov 7, 2008
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Rude? Who lied to you about the meaning of rude? TLG, your stories suck. They're poorly written, immature, nonsensical trash. I spit on you. What the hell kinda name is Willy Woo anyway? That's how you do it.

    Truer words have never been spoken, my friend.

    Post coming soon... I hope. I have a buttload of work to do.

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    Double09nhalf

    [8650]Nov 7, 2008
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    BaiMaoRieji wrote:

    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Rude? Who lied to you about the meaning of rude? TLG, your stories suck. They're poorly written, immature, nonsensical trash. I spit on you. What the hell kinda name is Willy Woo anyway? That's how you do it.

    Truer words have never been spoken, my friend.

    Post coming soon... I hope. I have a buttload of work to do.

    Burn, Burn- I mean flame or flaming. But the fighting scenes are okay.

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    Dafoose

    [8651]Nov 7, 2008
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Rude? Who lied to you about the meaning of rude?

    TLG, your stories suck. They're poorly written, immature, nonsensical trash. I spit on you. What the hell kinda name is Willy Woo anyway?

    That's how you do it.


    Well, I have more fun if I compare it to other things in a condescending way. That's just the way I do things.

    I never say things to insult anothers work, I just say things to make fun. I'm in the middle here, I'm not really Anti-TLG or Pro-TLG here. I'm Pro-Choice though, and I'm Pro-Awesomeness. Amirite '09?

    Yeah...retardedness....good times.
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    Double09nhalf

    [8652]Nov 8, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:
    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Rude? Who lied to you about the meaning of rude? TLG, your stories suck. They're poorly written, immature, nonsensical trash. I spit on you. What the hell kinda name is Willy Woo anyway? That's how you do it.
    Well, I have more fun if I compare it to other things in a condescending way. That's just the way I do things. I never say things to insult anothers work, I just say things to make fun. I'm in the middle here, I'm not really Anti-TLG or Pro-TLG here. I'm Pro-Choice though, and I'm Pro-Awesomeness. Amirite '09? Yeah...retardedness....good times.

    Um, Yay I like to jest about Pervy Sage but somebody post something already

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    Dafoose

    [8653]Nov 9, 2008
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    Root
    The Story of Kela Dasman, the Waterbender, and his Hawk.

    Prologue book 2

    After disembarking on his journey from the South Pole, Kela Dasman faced many challenges. From monstrous typhoons, to escaping mysterious pirates, he safely made his way to the North Pole. He also made some friends along the way, and he was very grateful for their companionship along the way.

    Mar was a female waterbender, novice still, but was capable of creating large waves. She had a hyper spirit that kept Kela going, as far as playing jokes and tricks was concerned.

    Saze was a brave firebender, who took on many challenges in the past. He quarrel with Aladdin, and fled with his partner in crime, Evelet.

    Evelet was a strong man, and his endurance was as strong as the sea. He sustained terrible injury for a week before they reached the North. But his friends had hope, and he survived a week of turmoil.

    On his last voyage, Kela had snuck past pirate ships patrolling the misty channels of the North. And in the middle of the sea at night, a tyrant of a storm came while Kela was still at sea. He trudged the large canoe with the help of Mar to protect themselves from the killer waves and merciless rain.

    But under all that water and pressure, Kela learned something about rain. He learned that the rain cleansed the heart, and made it strong. The rain was never too hard or too soft for the heart to handle, so no matter how glum the situation look, Kela knew that he could survive the weather within it's merciful bounds.

    Once they reached the North Pole, they were hospitalized for a week. Evelet was hospitalized for three weeks.

    After they recovered they met a man named Norman. This bald inventor created the North Pole printing press, and sent scouts around the world to gather news and information. But his scouts hardly returned. Kela's theory was that the pirates had been capturing them on their return home.

    But one of them came back. The man wheezed and coughed from his hardship across the frozen sea by lifeboat, where he managed to escape as a waterbender. He remembered the name of the leader of the Pirates, and it was Kela Dasman's father, Gaz.

    Kela was both happy and upset with the fact that his father had been alive after all. But he was a pirate, and Kela's sense of justice did not sit well with that.

    After further meditating, Kela regained his peace, and began training with Mar and Saze waterbending. Saze, who was not a waterbender however, just learned waterbending as it was a good opportunity to gain some insight on what was believed to be the most powerful martial art.

    As winter passed, Kela started seeing Loren more often, and they became more familiar with each other. But Kela wasn't sure if he would be happy not being alone.

    Evelet recovered from his wounds and soon joined Mar, Kela, and Saze in the waterbending lessons as well. Together they shared the art in common, and their friendship became strong.

    Kela also tried good hot tea. His words were, "This is the best thing ever!" and after his tea, he bought another case of Jasmine and honey green tea.

    Winter thawed into spring, but the four of them could hardly tell in the North Pole. But the feeling inside Kela was telling him to continue on once he had reached spring, and that his time in thl pure world of the North had to end, and he would search for his father with the new strength he had been looking to gain since his journey began.

    End prologue for Book 2.

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    confucioussayhi

    [8654]Nov 10, 2008
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    BaiMaoRieji wrote:

    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Rude? Who lied to you about the meaning of rude? TLG, your stories suck. They're poorly written, immature, nonsensical trash. I spit on you. What the hell kinda name is Willy Woo anyway? That's how you do it.

    Truer words have never been spoken, my friend.

    Post coming soon... I hope. I have a buttload of work to do.

    Yeah. *playing Fallout 3* I'm working too, just in my head. Dak's gonna be cutting guys in half. With his feet.
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    ThatLostGuy

    [8655]Nov 10, 2008
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    *shoots all of you with a shotgun*

    Well, thanks for the critique. You couldn't appreciate good writing if it hit you over the head and shouted, "AHHHH IM GOOD WRITING!!! R-R-R-READ MEEEEEEEE!!!"
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    BaiMaoRieji

    [8656]Nov 10, 2008
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    ThatLostGuy wrote:
    *shoots all of you with a shotgun* Well, thanks for the critique. You couldn't appreciate good writing if it hit you over the head and shouted, "AHHHH IM GOOD WRITING!!! R-R-R-READ MEEEEEEEE!!!"

    ... denial ain't just a river.

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    Double09nhalf

    [8657]Nov 10, 2008
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    BaiMaoRieji wrote:

    ThatLostGuy wrote:
    *shoots all of you with a shotgun* Well, thanks for the critique. You couldn't appreciate good writing if it hit you over the head and shouted, "AHHHH IM GOOD WRITING!!! R-R-R-READ MEEEEEEEE!!!"

    ... denial ain't just a river.

    Wow, I have got to remember that one. Anywho... I would take any of these guys literally (except Dafoose) and confusion is just being cranky and rude because its that time of the month again.

    Anywho, the computer tech guys found out that my hard drive is worse than TLG's writing and needs to be replaced. I talked to some guys from India about replacing the hard drive so i should be typing/posting soon.

    Edited on 11/11/2008 12:34pm
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    ThatLostGuy

    [8658]Nov 10, 2008
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    TLG's*** writing

    ....... Smart guy
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    Dafoose

    [8659]Nov 10, 2008
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    *Breathes*

    Ohhhh....
    ...

    Reading all that made me Rofl. Hard.

    HA!
    So what did you guys think of my Prologue/recap? Did i remember enough? Was it a good setup for the next story? Was it unesscessary?
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    Double09nhalf

    [8660]Nov 11, 2008
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    ThatLostGuy wrote:
    TLG's*** writing ....... Smart guy

    not sure what your talking about...

    And yes i read your recap Dafoose and I'm worried about your addiction to tea.

    I'm going to be posting soon so heads up.

    Edited on 11/11/2008 12:38pm
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