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    ThatLostGuy

    [7601]Jun 22, 2008
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    Dafoose. Don't expect this Season to end very soon. There's still way too much comotion on this thread and I want everyone to settle in nice and smoothe still.

    If I were you I'd think up a new plot and work with it.
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    r3173mpt10n

    [7602]Jun 22, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:

    All right, I have a few problems I want to adress, but I'm too lazy to type every single thing. I just want to know why Redemptions brother keeps on posting.

    I also want to see that gay signature of his GONE becuase that is immature and uneccessay. I'm also tired of seeing extremely short dialogues, with a million spaces and no plot whatsoever.

    I liked another one of second signs posts. He is definetely going somewhere with his story. But I just noticed a little small something, The "nevermind at the end of the paragraph. I didn't know where the sentence was going, but there are other ways to end sentences that talk about not explaining subjects. It just kind of joined the author and the writing, like a Vonnegut Novel. I don't care, I'm just mentioning. This waterbender, will she join Dosu? Sounds good man.

    Well, that's all for right now, and yes double09 I get the jokes. I liked the one with the doctor and the lady.

    Well, I suppose I could start writing my next story. I've already typed most of what I wanted to tell you guys. Kind of waiting for a finale. Just a few more stories and stuff. If there's anything you guys think I should write or talk about in my posts, please tell me so I can wrap up my season nicely.

    Thanks.


    He's my "cousin" and I wish to keep it that way, and I'm also annoyed with his posts...Sorry about that Dafoose. I'll advise his posts before he posts them to make sure they aren't bad to say the least...
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    Dafoose

    [7603]Jun 22, 2008
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    Kela Dasman and Agua Mar: Waterbenders.
    Day 32, the North Pole days.
    The apartment, Midnight.

    It was in the middle of the night when Kela woke up in the apartment, sitting in the chair in front of the fireplace, of which the embers smoldered and gave off dim light. Slouched and aching uncomfortably, he sat up and rubbed his eyes softly and scratched his face, afterwards, wiping his hands on his knees. He coughed a little bit from the smoke and began to think a little harder. He was confused and dazed as he woke up, hardly remembering the nightmare he had previously.

    It was a nightmare of giant penguins with razor sharp teeth attacking the South Pole. They were angry that there was no fish, because Kela had stopped catching the fish, which was his job before he left for the North Pole. The leader of the giant penguins jumped out of the water on to the approaching shore of the South Pole in a horrible blizzard and bellowed, "Where is Kela Dasman of the Southern Water Tribe???!!!" The leader and his army of blood thirsty, ravenous oversized penguins flopped out of the water with loud flops and Smacks on the shore, and waddled their way into the heart of the helpless village.

    The giant penguins swooped down and picked up the women and children, eating them whole, with blood all over their toothed beaks, and said afterwards, "I guess this will have to do!" They trampled the igloos and squashed their fires, leaving none alive. Kela Dasman arrived on his canoe to witness the massacre by the giant penguins, and screamed, "NOOOOOOOOO!!!" As he screamed, he saw his mother in the clutches of the leaders flippers, "Let me down right now!" said Kela's mother, Bes, who smacked the giant penguin with a frying pan repeatedly. Kela looked around inside his boat for weapons of anykind, but all he could find was a flyswatter. "DAMN IT!" he said. He picked up the fly swatter ran toward the giant leader penguin. The penguin looked at Kela and said, "Too late!" After saying that, he ate his mother, and Kela screamed again, "NOOOOOOOOO!!!"

    Kela stood up and walked quietly to the bathroom in Mar's and his own room, to get a drink of water from the sink. He poured the water into a crystalline cup, and took a giant swig. He was sweating from the nightmare, which no longer started to bother him. He put the cup back down and rubbed his face again. Kela then place himself in his own bed, underneath his clean sheets, with his face in his pillow. Mar stirred in her sleep and woke up moments later, asking, "What's wrong?" She turned toward Kela waiting for a simple response.

    Kela turned and looked at her, and said, "Penguins..." He turned the opposite direction and continued, "Ate my mother...and stuff. Big nasty penguins, with razor sharp teeth, and ravenous appetites." He took a deep sigh and turned his face to Mar, still trying to get comfortable. "The penguins were upset because I wasn't there to give them their fish."
    Mar turned away, drifting back to sleep and said, "Maybe it's a sign that you should get a job."

    Kela responded logically, "Or maybe I need to get a bigger flyswatter..." he said. He fell asleep and dreamed no more.

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    Ok TLG, I understand.

    Edited on 06/22/2008 9:04pm
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    Mei-Chi

    [7604]Jun 22, 2008
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    TLG,did u accept/decline Zehrzehr's charcter?
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    ThatLostGuy

    [7605]Jun 22, 2008
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    Did I really just read a whole post about man-eating penguins?!??!!

    *rubs eyes*
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    ThatLostGuy

    [7606]Jun 22, 2008
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    Mei-Chi wrote:
    TLG,did u accept/decline Zehrzehr's charcter?


    Who? Where is this character's description? Is he a primary or secondary character? Because if he's a secondary character then I dont need to approve of them as long as they follow RPG guidelines.
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    h3r01cdud3

    [7607]Jun 22, 2008
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    Name:Amaterasu Okami

    Gender: Male

    Age: 28

    Height: 6'0"

    Hair: Black in a spike.

    Eye Color: Violet

    Other Noticeable Features: None

    Occupation: Firebender

    Special Moves: Just uses basic and more advanced Firebending techniques.

    Weapons: A rare, indestructible scythe.

    Armor/Clothes: A pair of shoulder pads that look like dragons, a mask that is half white and half black, a black, long-sleeved shirt, a pair of black pants that is wrapped with bandages at the ankles, a pair of hand grips, and a pair of shoes.

    Personality: Stubborn, mean, and uncaring.

    History: Born into a wealthy family, orphaned because he burned his face, adopted by a councilman and his wife, joined the Fire Nation Army, became general, and is now waiting for orders to lead his troops to victory.

    ------------------------

    I'm starting anew.....His history is short sweet and to the point.

    http://public2.tektek.org/img/av/0806/d23/0/939a15.png (His looks.)

    His partners are Haruhi and Hakuro.

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    r3173mpt10n

    [7608]Jun 22, 2008
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    Name: Genesis F??ng

    Gender: Male

    Age: 21

    Height: 6'2"

    Hair: Dark-blueish, gray hair that sticks out in front of his face and falls along the side of his face.

    Eye Color: Its natural color is crimson. It changes to neon red when entering combat. The eyes can't be turned on and off voluntarily. The name for these cold-blooded eyes is "M??ng Y??n", which literally translates to "Fate" or "Destiny".

    Other Noticeable Features: He has a tattoo on each of his forearms. On the right it says "Life" and on the left it says "Death". They are both written in Gothique.

    Occupation: Airbending prodigy, master of swords, leader of the "Shǔ Guāng" which means "The dawn of a new epoch.", and a member of the Order of the White Lotus.

    Special Moves: Silhouette is an ability where shadows of his movement appear behind him to make an illusion of quick feet and to catch the enemy off guard with multiple images of the fighter. Other than that, he uses basic Airbending techniques and much more advanced ones. He also combines them with fighting **** used by other element benders. He can combine Firebending forms with Airbending (He can fight like a Firebender, but instead of fire he uses air.).

    Weapons: The blade is five feet long, two inches wide, and an inch thick. The blade's handle is wrapped in the finest leather, and the guard is shaped like an angel wing and covers the handle like a rapier does. It was dubbed "Shōu Gē Zhě", which means "Reaper" in Traditional Chinese.

    Armor/Clothes: He wears a long, black, and short-sleeved coat that has its collars propped up, a black, short-sleeved shirt, a pair of long, black pants, a pair of dark-blue, leather gloves, a pair of black, leather boots with a thin sheet of metal on the toes and spikes on the bottom, and a black sheathe on his waist. The sheathe doesn't point down but points horizontally across like a flat line.

    Personality: He is very reserved, anti-social, and pessimistic. But he is strategic, a perfectionist, and a quick learner. In battle he shows no mercy to his enemies and is very ruthless, fierce, and uncaring. He can be very emotionless most of the times due to his troubling past. He believes that emotions are useless objects that interfere with everything. He also follows orders as they are told with 100% accuracy and success. He can be very deceiving at times and most people don't even know it.

    History: He was born into a rich family, but was cared for in secret. His dad was an Airbender and his mother was just another person. They lived in a quiet and peaceful village hidden in a thick forest. He was just about two years old when his village was found and attacked by the Fire Nation. They wiped out the entire village and found him crying in one of the burning buildings.

    A Firebender ran in and saved him and raised him like her own. When he turned five, she sent him to a Fire Nation School. He was caught Airbending and taken away. Instead of being killed, he was put into a training program with two other children in a secret facility underneath a school.

    One was a male Earthbender named Giro (He has brown, spiky hair and has a scar across the bridge of his nose. He has green eyes and wears the same thing that Genesis wears.), and the other was a female Waterbender named Katsumi (She has long, black hair and has part of it coming down and covering he right eye. She has the most beautiful eyes and a charm that makes almost any man fall head over heels. She wears the same stuff that Genesis and Giro wears except instead of a long, black coat, she wears a short, sleeveless jacket.) . They were also five years old and taken away from other Fire Nation Schools across the Fire Nation cities. They lived there as if it were their home and trained and learned. They were kept from other people until they grew up and started to perfect their elements. Genesis perfected his long before the other two and had spent his time mastering the art of sword fighting.

    He learned many things during his time in there until they decided it was time to put them into action. The Fire Nation admirals voted Genesis to be the leader and to name the three man group the Crusaders. They were designed specifically to take out targets in the name of the Fire Nation army. No one knew about them except for the admirals and a few other smart soldiers that helped build the team. Not even the Fire Lord had any knowledge of the secret hunting team.

    The first mission was a failure because Genesis strayed from the mission to help out Katsumi who was accidentally captured by the enemy. He was severely punished and was whipped. Two strong lashes gave him his "X" shaped scar on his chest. From that day on, he decided to let go of emotions and put them aside. Their missions were always successful from that day on and were done with the utmost precision and accuracy. They were so good that they were believed to be just rumors and that the deaths were just random happenings. He now left the Crusaders in order to create his own organization made of him, Giro, Katsumi, and Karin. Their goal is to create peace throughout the four different nations their own way.

    GenesisHere's an image of him. I kind of changed his profile a bit, but not too much.

    Giro Here's an image of Giro and his liquin.

    Katsumi Here's an image of Katsumi using her angel wings, holding her water-pouch, and waterbending.

    Karin Here's an image of Karin firebending.

    Edited on 06/23/2008 2:52pm
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    Double09nhalf

    [7609]Jun 23, 2008
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    Your sure you used the girl form when you made the last chick(hard to tell )
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    Double09nhalf

    [7610]Jun 23, 2008
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    Another one bites the dust...

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    Siam- airbender

    Mizuhiro- firebender/swordsman

    Master Ikasoruk- master swordsman

    ~~ just reached the western airtemple~~

    ///////////////////////

    Siam twirled her staff in the air to fold it up and placed it in the strap on her back then proceeded to walk down the tiled stone floor. A second later she heard a loud (Thrump) and turned to see Kempa and passengers land next to her. Being excited, Kempa started to lick Siam's face.

    "Okay, okay you can go to the sanctuary after we unload. How is everyone doing," Siam started to yell.

    Master Ikasoruk jumped down with ease but Mizuhiro didn't follow suit. Siam jumped onto the saddle to find a rattled Mizuhiro who smelled of acid and partially digested stomach contents.

    "I, I want to get off the ride n-now," said Mizuhiro.

    "Mizuhiro, Kempa already landed...,"said Siam.

    "Then why is the saddle still shacking and why does Kempa have the hiccups," asked Mizuhiro.

    Siam jumped off the saddle and stared at Kempa with an angry look on her face.

    "He doesn't have the hiccups he's laughing. You could have gone easy on them you know."

    After all the supplies had been unloaded Kempa flew off around the rocky edge.

    Raising a shaky finger Mizuhiro asked, "Where is he going?"

    "Well even though this is my second time being here, Kempa was born here. He's probably going to the animal sanctuary," Siam replied.

    "Siam? Siam is that you...?"

    Siam turned around and saw a familiar face. She was a little shorter than Siam with blonde hair and brown eyes. Next to the women was a girl holding a clipboard.

    "River? What are you doing here? I thought you were still working at the academy? But before that I need to talk to the council."

    "You do? My, my it must be something big. Tam, my dear, tell the council they have a visitor and that's it urgent," said River waving the girl off, "Now you and I have so much catching up to do."

    River then turned toward Siam's two traveling companions.

    "And who are your two traveling companions, the sleeping boy is cute."

    "Oh, where are my manners and where are your manners..." Siam said as she shook the Mizuhiro awake, "You couldn't stay awake to five minutes if your lives depended on it."

    Mizuhiro woke up and rubbed his eyes, "Eh, what?"

    "I'd like you both to meet my best friend River," said Siam, "She's and I met at the airbending academy. She likes to travel a lot myself but she got a job here... what was it again?"

    "I'm one of the concierges and tour-guides," replied River, "So if you need any help just ask me. By the way Siam did you want to see the monks now or after you unpack?"

    "I need to talk to them now. They need to know."

    River walked up to Siam and hugged her tightly.

    "I'm sorry about your parents but you're with friends now. Everything is going to be okay. Ah here they are now."

    Tam returned with two monks trailing her. The two monks in brown and yellow garbs walked toward Siam in unison with their hands together. As they approached one of the monks stopped while the other walked in a circle around Siam until he was on the opposite side. They both bowed their head toward Siam and she did the same. Then Siam walked with them to the air-temple.

    "Well," said River, "any friend of Siam is a friend of mine. Tam, what residence can we put them in?"

    Tam checked her clipboard quickly and found an opening.

    "The Floating Water lily has spare rooms they can use," she said.

    River replied, "Fine then. If you will kindly pick up your supplies and follow me I'll direct you to your room."

    ```````````````````

    Meanwhile Siam followed the monks through the air-temple. The entire ceiling was emerald green with a marble floor. And in the center stood the last airbender to be avatar: Avatar Zephry. The entire statue was fifty feet tall and was twenty feet long from shoulder to shoulder. The monks directed Siam to the left foot of the statue. Right in front of the foot where three holes. Siam went to the middle hole and took out her staff. She swung it in the air then jammed it into the hole causing the foot to split in half revealing stairs that lead downward. One of the monks beckoned her to go while the other bowed with his hands together. At the bottom of the stairs was a wooden door with a slot near the top. The slot opened and a pair of eyes stared though.

    "Who knocks at the garden gate?"

    To this Siam replied, "One who has eaten the fruit and tasted its mysteries."

    The slot closed and the door creaked open on its hinges.

    Siam walked into a circular room that was completely dark except for four candles that went around a circle that was in the middle of the room.

    Siam stepped in the middle circle and remained quiet. when door to the room silently shut someone began to speak.

    "Welcome Siam...we knew you were coming."

    //////////////////////

    Yes its the Order of the White Lotus

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    Dafoose

    [7611]Jun 23, 2008
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    Good chapter.
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    Dafoose

    [7612]Jun 23, 2008
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    ThatLostGuy wrote:
    Did I really just read a whole post about man-eating penguins?!??!! *rubs eyes*

    Well...I described the penguins eating women and children rather than men, but uh, it wasn't real. It was just something I wanted to add. It was about a dream Kela had.

    ROFLMAO?

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    confucioussayhi

    [7613]Jun 23, 2008
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    Dak(White fire)

    Still fighting, I suppose.

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    After assisting Ariel, Dak and Sayo joined back in on the fight in the cloud of dust. It was stifling, hot, and dark. Immediately, Burai began shouting commands to them.

    "Duck! Stand and turn left! There, attack! No, not like that!"

    Dak was turned around. He had ducked, and turned, but nobody was there from him to attack. She had switched situations, or maybe wasn't even talking to him.

    "Screw this..." he mumbled.

    Dak remembered situations like this back during his days in the arena. Cloud would be used to heighten suspense. Then, Dak had used his hearing and feeling to determine where an enemy was. In this situation however, there was a mass of movement, masking individual footsteps and the sounds of weapons clanging and people shouting wasn't helping much.

    Before Dak could begin to isolate specific sounds or movements near him, he felt something cold and hard scrape his shoulder blades and land in the ground behind his heels with a dull thud. Dak snapped out of his focus and stepped back hard on the weapon. There was some tension at first, but he pressed hard and felt the tension disappear and his attacker dropped it. As his bare foot fell down on the side of the blade, his felt warm, sticky liquid between his toes. Dak knew this person had hurt or killed at least one of his comrades. Immediately, there was a sound of a sword being unsheathed and Dak furiously tried the same. But, his sword would not come out of it's sheath. Dak slid his hand down the handle and felt the hilt. It was rusted shut again. It had been like this last year when he grabbed this katana out of the armory at Ru-Kabe(Po-Kun, maybe?). He had never bothered to remove the rust and it seems it was back to haunt him. He had found a way around it and that required sheathing and drawing it in a specific manner. He must have sheathed it wrong the last time it was used. He jerked and twisted it for a moment and realized he didn't have time for it now.

    Dak quickly untied the sheath from his belt, just in time to hear a faint whistling sound to the left. Dak ducked, escaping decapitation, and raised his sheath above his head, catching the blow and rolling the trader's sword off to the side. The motion spun them around and Dak stepped in, cracking them in the side with his "weapon". He felt them bend into the attack and smirked. He brought the sheath back and aimed a strike at the back of the trader's legs, but felt they had suddenly turned. Dak figured that at his crouching position, an attack could come from one direction. He stood a little and raised his sheath over his head. The blow connected and Dak was shocked to be forced to his knees by the strength of the attack. His elbows buckled and he heard his wooden sheath spilt down it's length and felt the katana inside bend inwards. He realized though, that this was a perfect opportunity to disarm the trader and quickly stood, twisting so his back was to their front. He rolled his broken sheath around to the top of his opponent's sword and wrapped his arms around their hands. Standing up fully and raising his body with his arm, he used the downwards motion of his hands as leverage and the trader dropped the sword with a cry of pain. Dak's busted sheath went with it and he kicked both aside. Dak took his chance and stepped around his opponent's back, lighting his right hand with a fire blade and bringing his left down across their neck and shoulder to hold them as he stabbed. His left hand made contact first and cupped around something large, round, and soft on the trader's chest. Dak stopped in mid-strike. He couldn't believe it.

    The trader took their chance at his halt and elbowed him in the ribs. Hard. He felt three cracks. The trader stepped back and Dak clutched his side as it exploded with pain. His vision of the dust was hazier than usual as his eyes slid in and out of focus. He almost ignored it as he remained in a bigger state of shock and surprise.

    "You're a girl!?! Damn, you hit like a man! A big, muscle-bound man at that..." he trailed off.

    For once, the trader spoke. "I'm a woman and thanks to your stupidity and hesitation at that fact, I broke your ribs. You probably can't even stand up. Sexist moron."

    "Oh spare me, I know plenty of women that could beat my ass. Just, damn..." he replied awkwardly.

    "I'll take that as a crude compliment, I suppose. Stand up, you're embarrassing yourself."

    He did so. This time, he lit both hands with fire and charged her. Almost. It was a strange, half run, half limp combination. He reached where he'd heard her voice and leapt at her. She grabbed his hands and extinguished them. Then, as Dak was in midair, she kneed him in the stomach and flipped him to the ground. He took the first hit and held tight on her hands as he hit the ground. As he rolled backwards, he put his feet on her hips and extended his legs, throwing her back when he rolled. He pulled her closer though, instead of letting her fly and finished his roll by pushing off and landing on top of her. This time, he didn't hesitate to stab her. She moved her neck out of the way and took the attack in the right shoulder. She struck him with her palm in the chest and rolled over on her stomach with Dak still straddled on top. She got her knees under her and kicked off, flipping Dak onto his back. Miraculously, her hand landed on the first weapon he took away from her and she grabbed it. Both of them stood and the trader charged Dak. He rolled his shoulder back and turned as the sword missed. He felt around to grab the small of her back and brought his right leg to loosely hook her right thigh. Her forward movement and his resulting throw took her to the ground. Dak unintentionally fell with her but took advantage of it. He lit his hand once more and as they both landed, his fire blade slipped very easily through her ribs and into her abdomen. She cried out in pain as the blood gushed out of her and covered Dak's hand and upper arm. As the dust began to clear some, he could see that she was no older than him, and very beautiful.

    "What a waste. She could have done better than this." He looked at the dark blood covering nearly his entire forearm and shook his head.

    The sounds of battle hand begun to lessen. The fight was nearly over.

    ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////

    Well, I think I did fairly well, considering. Left it open for Chad to finish the fight or keep it going.

    P.S. What the hell was up with the last few pages? Too much off-topic crap.

    P.P.S. Finally TLG, you do something good. Stopped this "Dark Aura" nonsense and told these fools to stay on topic! You almost get a huzzah.

    Would you believe that my computer crapped out on me and I had to write this twice? Oh yeah.

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    Dafoose

    [7614]Jun 23, 2008
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    Nice action post, I liked the fight scene with Dak.
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    confucioussayhi

    [7615]Jun 23, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:
    Nice action post, I liked the fight scene with Dak.
    Thanks.

    Hmm, the odd-one-out response to my posts again... hmm...
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    Mei-Chi

    [7616]Jun 23, 2008
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    ThatLostGuy wrote:
    Mei-Chi wrote:
    TLG,did u accept/decline Zehrzehr's charcter?
    Who? Where is this character's description? Is he a primary or secondary character? Because if he's a secondary character then I dont need to approve of them as long as they follow RPG guidelines.

    It's a primary charcter,ugh,I told him he should ask,ok,i will find the page.

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    Double09nhalf

    [7617]Jun 23, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:
    Good chapter.

    Thanks man

    i made most of the revisions you suggested but some well... it either didn't sound right or i couldn't make it work

    anybody need help with anything ask Dafoose (The guy could be a freaken professor)

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    Mei-Chi

    [7618]Jun 23, 2008
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    Zehrzehr's charcter is on page 377,TLG
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    -TheSecondSign-

    [7619]Jun 23, 2008
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    Dosu Kinuta, Itami Kinuta, Springfeet, several characters with names I should probably give out in the next section

    --

    Springfeet took off into the air and Dosu charged towards Itami. He made several strikes, but Itami blocked them all.

    "Ahahaha! Is this all you can muster, oh great Silent Walker?" Itami asked, as he dodged another sword strike. Dosu's injuries were starting to catch up to him. He grunted as he jumped back, but managed to make a second jump and flipped to safety just as Springfeet landed on Itami's location. The entire surrounding area exploded into a huge, chaotic inferno. Springfeet twirled on the balls of his feet and the flames subsided, allowing him to see clearly. Itami had managed to escape the blast. A maniacal grin was etched upon his face.

    Dosu charged up behind him once again and the two started trading strikes with one another. Dosu backed off just as Springfeet kicked an enormous pillar of fire at them. It avoided Dosu, but Itami once again cleared the blast. He was just too fast. Itami began to close in on Springfeet when Dosu got inbetween them. He swung at Itami with incredible force, and just as Itami blocked it, Dosu jumped over him and then to Itami's left. Itami looked up to see another firekick coming at him. People had already began to avoid their battle, instead opting to run around it, where more raiding pirates waited.

    Itami ran wildly at Springfeet, who jumped back and then flew into the air again. Dosu met up with Itami once more and their swords met, but he jumped back again as Springfeet landed on Itami's location again. Itami cleared the blast and looked up.

    "Oh man this is just too fun," he said. He hadn't even broken a sweat. Springfeet showed little fatigue but was still not keeping up. Dosu looked tired, his chest wound had begun to reopen and blood poored out onto the ground. He coughed and spat out blood.

    "Geeze, Dossy. You look tired," he mocked, and then turned to Springfeet, "What's wrong leadfoot? You don't have an excuse. You're perfectly fine."

    Springfeet growled and kicked a huge circle of at him. Itami jumped clear over them and then moved to the right, intent on striking. Springfeet kicked the ground and then swiftly shifted his foot across the ground. Fire spewed forth and swept across their arena, but Itami jumped high into the air. Springfeet kicked into the air, but Itami twirled and went underneath the blast, then landed, jumped, and came behind Springfeet. Springfeet tried to turn around, but Itami struck him in the leg and then jumped again, this time to Dosu.

    Dosu raised his swords to block the attacks but his injuries were sapping his strength. Dosu fell back from the force of the blow and the ground hard. He spat out more blood. Itami was about to finish him off, but a massive wave of water struck him. He flew into a nearby building and then looked up, completely soaked.

    "Why, you LITTLE-"

    She cut him off with a massive wave of water that he avoided but the water recircled around.

    "THIS little trick huh? Even your injured mercanary here could avoid this as he is," Itami said as he jumped into the air and then off the side of a building, landed closer to her. He bolted to her at intense speed, but he was cut short when Dosu ran at him again. He dodged to the side, just in time to see a blast from Springfeets good leg. He jumped and then charged at Dosu, with a crazed look of fury on his face. His attack was stopped by another water wave, followed by a fireblast.

    Dosu charged into the steam and sparks could be seen flying where their swords met. The girl cleared the steam and then rose water above them.

    "Mercanary!" she yelled right before she dropped the hovering water onto their heads, as blades of thin ice. Dosu looked up and jumped clear of the raining death. Itami stood his ground and twirled his swords in the air, blocking the rain of blades. Springfeet shot another blast him, and he avoided it.

    "How much does it take to kill this guy?!" the girl screamed as Itami engaged Dosu once more. Suddenly her brother intervened and began using earthbending to launch large chunks of earth at Itami. Springfeet, the two kids, and now another girl all suddenly attacked as well, just as Dosu avoided the massive blasts. Itami saw them coming but jumped away. An explosion formed where the attacks had met that knocked Itami off his stand and threw Dosu into a pile of crates.

    Itami looked up, crazed.

    "SO THIS IS HOW IT IS, DOSU?! You can't defeat me on your own so you call in the cavalry?" Itami screamed.

    "...Yeah, actually. That is how it works," he said. "I'm injured, how you expect me to fight?"

    "Alright then. This isn't over. You think I'm all there is? Enjoy your freedom kiddies," he said, as he began to back off, "because The Twelve don't like it when a mission fails."

    "Get him!" the second girl yelled and everyone gave it all they had left, but after the dust had cleared, Itami Kinuta was gone.

    As the group realized that their new enemy was gone, Springfeet and the other newcomer suddenly shifted their attention at Dosu's party. The one firebender girl put her finger to the other's head, and Springfeet stood up as best he could. Pirates had begun to surround them.

    "Now that THAT litte problem is out of the way, we can finally solve our differences, Dosu."

    Dosu took a step back then looked around him.

    "...Crap."

    Edited on 06/23/2008 11:20am
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    Double09nhalf

    [7620]Jun 23, 2008
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Dafoose wrote:
    Nice action post, I liked the fight scene with Dak.
    Thanks. Hmm, the odd-one-out response to my posts again... hmm...

    i liked the action to man(a little hard to visualize but very cool)

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