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    Dafoose

    [9221]Apr 26, 2009
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    Double09nhalf wrote:
    Hey dafoose. I know your the leading authority and all but if David E Oliver will stick with it. I would like to see him write a story using A avatar and his what-ifs. My only requirement is that he doesn't use Aang (mostly because he's got the personality all wrong) or any of the characters from the show. This is a new season and if it matters i'm putting out my opinion.

    Sure, I think that's a great idea if you got a plan. ^_^
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    David-E-Oliver

    [9222]Apr 27, 2009
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    Sorry I admit I have difficulty figuring out the personality of cartoon characters. I suppose I will do that and not use Aang. But if you could, please help me and let me know how Aang would have acted.
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    Dafoose

    [9223]Apr 27, 2009
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    I don't think you need to worry about the original characters.
    Just make your own character. You really shouldn't and don't need to use copyrighted characters from the show to make your story more interesting.

    In fact, using characters from the show makes your stories dull. = ='
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    Double09nhalf

    [9224]Apr 27, 2009
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    Dafoose wrote:
    I don't think you need to worry about the original characters. Just make your own character. You really shouldn't and don't need to use copyrighted characters from the show to make your story more interesting. In fact, using characters from the show makes your stories dull. = ='

    I'm not going to go into the complex charactoristics of Aang but i can tell you that people can take you writing more seriously if you don't use him and make your own.

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    Siam - airbender

    Mizuhiro - firebender

    Master Ikasoruk - firebender/ sword master

    ~~Fleeing the firenation army~~

    ////////////////////////////

    Even though Kempa hadn't rested enough Siam encouraged him to continue fleeing their pursuers. It had gotten cold that evening and even though the weather had gotten a little chillier in the evenings the wind had changed in their favor making the trip easier.

    But even with the smooth sailing things were terrible. Mizuhiro finally had awoken from his long period of unconsciousness only to become sick with fever. During the long nights they took off his clothes so the wind could cool him off but Mizuhiro's fever persisted. Even in his sleep Mizuhiro seemed to be in pain.

    He would whisper, "Don't kill her. I, I love...," and, "Father we must escape."

    Siam didn't know what to do. When Siam got sick she would rely on her parents to comfort her but they weren't... here. Siam started to shake but calmed herself and focused. With the fire-nation closing in on them she could lose herself, not now.

    As Siam brooded someone tapped on her shoulder causing her to jump. She turned around to see Master Ikasoruk squatting behind her. He motioned for her to come to the front of Kempa's saddle where they could talk.

    "He won't live much longer in this condition," said Master Ikasoruk, "we need to land somewhere next to a body of water so we can submerse him so his temperature will go down".

    Siam only nodded to this then turned and leapt onto Kempa's neck, "Okay buddy, we need to find some water and land next to it."

    Kempa flew low over the trees as they looked for some water. A moment later Siam found it. It was a shallow water fall next to a grassy bank. Pointing Kempa in the right direction she yelled, "Yip, yip!"

    Kempa spiraled down at an alarming rate only to pull up a minute later as he touched the ground. Siam immediately jumped down and helped carry Mizuhiro but the moment she touched him she recoiled from the heat. Master Ikasoruk counterbalanced the boy's weight and carried him over to the pool submersing Mizuhiro's entire body except for his head. As his temperature went down they pulled him out of the water and let Mizuhiro sleep on Kempa while they set up camp.

    After camp was set up and they had a fire going Siam made a small meal out of their provisions. They then went and woke up Mizuhiro long enough to feed him a little soup. He went to sleep soundly a few minutes later as they ate their meal in quiet. But as Siam ate, something bothered her. For his temperature to be that high he would have been dead hours ago. Master Ikasoruk saw her concern and spoke.

    "Fire-benders can become sick but what Lord Mizuhiro has is different from normal sickness. What you see happening to him is the result of when a fire-bender loses control of his emotions."

    Siam replied, "His emotions?"

    "Precisely, his emotions. You see emotions can affect us more than we realize. Emotions can affect our health and self control and to this extent our actions. When you are angry do you burn up or feel hot headed? For fire-benders who are novice at controlling their fire-bending or their feelings the two become the same thing."

    Siam thought the whole philosophical discussion was a little bit weird but Master Ikasoruk continued.

    "For some people emotions like anger can improve the strength of their bending ability. But when left unchecked and misused anger can destroy a person. This is what you see happening with Lord Mizuhiro."

    Siam had been holding on to her questions but now only one came to mind." What must we do to help him?"

    Master Ikasoruk chuckled to himself, "We? We can do nothing. It is all up to him whether or not he will let his anger destroy him or not. If anything we can encourage his decision and nothing else."

    And with that he fell asleep leaving Siam to ponder as she stared at the dying embers turning to soot.

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    Eman5805

    [9225]Apr 28, 2009
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    Van (Qiang)
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    Van gets a bomb dropped on him when he learns he's wanted for the murder of desert baron Xin Mao. And on top of that the formerly silent Lyra opens up and starts talking to him.
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    Those forces of the universe were at it again. Those forces acts of coitus have gotten me into a fine mess of bull-spider crap. After Lyra said her bit of confession about how apparently I'm the only person who knows she exists. Which is a load. That pirate she thrashed damn well knows she exists, and so do the other pirates that the previous pirate was thrashed into. But, whatever. That's nothing.

    During the long trek through the dense forest chocked path, I had even more time to mull over exactly how much crap I was in. Or whether or not I should even be headed to Ba Sing Se right now.

    Now that I thought about it, something was off. I sort of noticed it before, but I was so angry at the slut Siyo-and I still very much am-I wasn't thinking too clearly. But, the parchment was off. It was handwritten and the picture was handdrawn. Or at least I think it was. I couldn't be sure without it infront of me, and I sorely wished I hadn't tore the thing up.

    "I don't suppose you found two of those posters?" I asked Lyra. She looked at me and blinked. I rolled my eyes back at her. "Great, we're back to this now."

    And then there's the matter of the bounty. Not that it was too high, it's just that there shouldn't even be a bounty anymore. Bounty hunting was considered illegal now and officially released wanted posters were only done to warn the public. Apparently the Avatar took issue with bounty hunters for some reason, so since he was close with the Earth King he had them outlawed. But, that's just how impractical the kid could be. The Earth Kingdom is massive. It's easy as hell for anyone to do what they want and disappear. Like a certain spear swinging guy I know. And bounty hunters at least maintain a long distance order. And since like the army, the police are lazy they do a lot of things under the table and use special wording to mask that they were asking for the same damn thing.

    "Any information leading to the arrest will carry a 300 gold piece reward." If that isn't the same thing as telling a bounty hunter "But, if you bring us this dirtbag in chains, we'll give you far more than that", then my name isn't Van...and some other stuff behind Van.

    Yet, that wanted poster was clear as day. A throwback to a year or so ago. "Dead or Alive". That kind of sign couldn't have come from the police. It was a personally made sign. The bounty may or may not have been real, but the intent is clear.

    Someone out there want's me for killing Xin Mao.

    As soon as that thought formed in my mind, a chill snaked up my spine. I stopped, gripped my spear which I had in a strap on my back. I would've died in the in the war if I didn't trust and hone sharp instincts. The Fire Nation loves to ambush and I've seen my fair share of sudden attacks. I even managed to learn the signs to see them coming. Like the sudden absense chattering animals and insects in the brush. Or how the air feels heavier and slightly warmer. Like sleeping on my feet, I thought I was pretty good at sensing an ambush. I felt I was probably one of the best and noticed things well.

    Didn't stop me from not noticing that Lyra was gone. I looked around me and saw nothing. "Damn it!" She didn't have any waterskin so had nothing to bend, making her defenseless. Could someone have grabbed her? No, why grab her and not me? So did she just run off? She could've vanished at any time.

    I felt another chill. Focus, Van. Deal with whatever might be out there now and find the brat later.

    If you think someone is about to jump you, you only have a few options. If you suspect a direct ambush with men leaping from trees, you scan the trees. But, if you don't find whoever is there, you leave youself open to the guy(s) on the ground. Ideally you have one eye the threes and the other covers the ground. When there's just one, you really have no choice but to leave one open. I'd have to-

    I yanked my spear free of the harness in a smooth, practiced motion I'd used dozens of times before, and swung it in an upward motion. The blunt end of my staff caught the arrow just behind the tip. It snapped like a twig. I twirled my spear in front of me. Two more arrows deflected off it. I didn't give the attacker a still target and started moving. I cut left as a fourth arrow struck the ground I was just standing in.

    I was already processing two facts: This person was shooting through the trees. And each arrow was coming at a downward angle.

    And I came to the obvious conclusion: archer in the trees.

    If I had time, I would've cracked a grin at how typical this loser was being. But, I didn't because I had a strong feeling that the archer wasn't working-

    A man a few inches shorter than me, sprang from the bushes behind me. Fire was trailing from his fist. He didn't get half out of his crouch before I smacked him in the face with the backend. Spinning on my heels, I avoided the errant fireblast. I stepped around him and grabbed him around the neck my free arm, forcing him into a standing position again. He wasn't wearing any kind of armor, unless a stupid brown and black shirt counts. So, the three arrows his partner fired went right into his chest.

    The Firebender cried out in my arms then went limp. I heard a slightly muffled curse in the distance.

    Now I grinned. "There you are." I released my grip on the man and whirled my spear into the crook of my arm and charged into the trees. Normally charging at an archer is a bad move, but while the trees around him broke line of sight of me from him, it worked double for him. That's why the arrows were coming so infrequently. If I knew preciesly where he was, he'd have to move and would be completely vulnerable. And to top it off I serpentined from tree to tree. He'd have to be able to predict my movements to a T to nail me now, and I'm not slow.

    I didn't hear any movement head of me, so I don't think he moved, but I also didn't hear any limbs breaking or rustling leaves other than what I myself was making. What, was he going to wait for me? Was I running into a trap?

    I slowed my run, hoping that I could react to any booby traps, when I heard a large thump. I slowed to a slow stalk, I guess. Not sure what you call a guy with a spear moving slowly through the woods. That's how people used to hunt for food. But, eventually I found the archer. He was laying on his back staring up at the tree he was in, but he saw nothing. His mouth gaping and his eyes were glassy. I'd seen enough dead bodies in my day to know one when I see it. I'd say that was another skill, but he was bleeding heavily from the mouth. I walked over and knelt besides his body. I saw the shard of ice protruding through the back of his neck and felt another chill, but this one wasn't confined to a part of my body.

    This one was felt all over.

    And without making any noise I could here, Lyra was standing next to me. In a suprise to myself, I didn't flinch an inch. I just stared at her. She was looking at the man's body. The look on her face seemed like her natrual, netural self, but something was different. It wasn't really her face. That wasn't actually different. It was what I felt behind it that made her eyes look more...eerie.

    No, it was what I didn't feel.

    Lyra just killed a man, and didn't even look like she cared.

    Edited on 04/28/2009 9:23pm
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    Double09nhalf

    [9226]Apr 28, 2009
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    Cold blooded killer chick

    Mess with her and you'll find the larger portion of a icicle entering your brains and exiting your spleen.

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    BaiMaoRieji

    [9227]Apr 29, 2009
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    Brain to spleen? That's f***ing hardcore
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    BaiMaoRieji

    [9228]Apr 30, 2009
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    Good news everybody! I will have finishes all of my finals by next Friday, and will be able to post my finale on the following Monday, at the earliest
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    Double09nhalf

    [9229]May 1, 2009
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    BaiMaoRieji wrote:
    Good news everybody! I will have finishes all of my finals by next Friday, and will be able to post my finale on the following Monday, at the earliest
    Ya you and everbody else

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    Eman5805

    [9230]May 1, 2009
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    Double09nhalf wrote:

    Cold blooded killer chick

    Mess with her and you'll find the larger portion of a icicle entering your brains and exiting your spleen.



    Heh, more like "Mess with Van and you'll find..."
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    Dafoose

    [9231]May 2, 2009
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    Double09nhalf wrote:

    BaiMaoRieji wrote:
    Good news everybody! I will have finishes all of my finals by next Friday, and will be able to post my finale on the following Monday, at the earliest
    Ya you and everbody else


    Here here, I got an essay due, 4 finals to study for, and an art project due by the end of may. xD
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    Double09nhalf

    [9232]May 2, 2009
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    Dafoose wrote:
    Double09nhalf wrote:

    BaiMaoRieji wrote:
    Good news everybody! I will have finishes all of my finals by next Friday, and will be able to post my finale on the following Monday, at the earliest
    Ya you and everbody else

    Here here, I got an essay due, 4 finals to study for, and an art project due by the end of may. xD

    If you die of overexertion then I call your computer equipement. And TLG can have you story writing skills. We all know he needs it.

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    Dafoose

    [9233]May 2, 2009
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    Lol.
    I am building a new computer. It's going to be pretty nice. xD
    TLG + My writing skills = I would've had willy woo's afro kill somebody somehow and it would've been epic.

    Well, I do want to "implement" My writing skills soon, before I die of this over exertion. =P
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    confucioussayhi

    [9234]May 4, 2009
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    Hey. I'll post eventually. the state of Florida is trying to do away with my virtual school courses, so it's been pretty hectic lately. I have to do a month and a half's work in like two weeks. When I get the schane, I'll redo my last post so everyone remembers where I was at last. And I want to change some of the wording.

    Chad: Woot. Bring it on, I've been waiting for your finale.
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    Double09nhalf

    [9235]May 4, 2009
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Hey. I'll post eventually. the state of Florida is trying to do away with my virtual school courses, so it's been pretty hectic lately. I have to do a month and a half's work in like two weeks. When I get the schane, I'll redo my last post so everyone remembers where I was at last. And I want to change some of the wording. Chad: Woot. Bring it on, I've been waiting for your finale.

    Out of curiousity, why is the "state of Florida" trying to do that?

    Hurry up and post (someone besides eman and myself)

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    FireLordZuko93

    [9236]May 6, 2009
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    hey guys

    Ive been wanting to join this thing for a while now...but i figured i would need to read everything to know what was going on...it took 5 months but now im probably one of the few people that has read everything

    so yeah... i conciter myself an ok writer (expect my spelling is terrible ) ..so if yall would like fresh blood in the thread id be happy to join i already have a character profile and everything..but im still working on the history

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    Eman5805

    [9237]May 6, 2009
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    FireLordZuko93 wrote:

    hey guys

    Ive been wanting to join this thing for a while now...but i figured i would need to read everything to know what was going on...it took 5 months but now im probably one of the few people that has read everything

    so yeah... i conciter myself an ok writer (expect my spelling is terrible ) ..so if yall would like fresh blood in the thread id be happy to join i already have a character profile and everything..but im still working on the history



    Holy crap, you actually went through all 920 something pages?

    Man, that means you read all the crazy mess in the middle with the zombies...
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    FireLordZuko93

    [9238]May 6, 2009
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    Eman5805 wrote:
    FireLordZuko93 wrote:

    hey guys

    Ive been wanting to join this thing for a while now...but i figured i would need to read everything to know what was going on...it took 5 months but now im probably one of the few people that has read everything

    so yeah... i conciter myself an ok writer (expect my spelling is terrible ) ..so if yall would like fresh blood in the thread id be happy to join i already have a character profile and everything..but im still working on the history



    Holy crap, you actually went through all 920 something pages?

    Man, that means you read all the crazy mess in the middle with the zombies...


    yeah i did which is why it took sooooo long im such a lurker

    yeah..wtf was TGL thinking? the first 2 seasons were really good though...i loved Rin and Scorch lolz i thought it was weird that you had rexton sr. (i think i spelled that wrong..) bald orginally
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    Dafoose

    [9239]May 6, 2009
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    FireLordZuko93 wrote:
    Eman5805 wrote:
    FireLordZuko93 wrote:

    hey guys

    Ive been wanting to join this thing for a while now...but i figured i would need to read everything to know what was going on...it took 5 months but now im probably one of the few people that has read everything

    so yeah... i conciter myself an ok writer (expect my spelling is terrible ) ..so if yall would like fresh blood in the thread id be happy to join i already have a character profile and everything..but im still working on the history



    Holy crap, you actually went through all 920 something pages?

    Man, that means you read all the crazy mess in the middle with the zombies...


    yeah i did which is why it took sooooo long im such a lurker

    yeah..wtf was TGL thinking? the first 2 seasons were really good though...i loved Rin and Scorch lolz i thought it was weird that you had rexton sr. (i think i spelled that wrong..) bald orginally

    Fire lady zuko/firelord zuko you are welcome. Dish it girl.
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    Double09nhalf

    [9240]May 6, 2009
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    Your actually a girl??? I thought that Dafoose was making fun of you at first until i read your page. And after looking at it, I have to say that i like the zuko evolution pictures. That is really cool. It shows him growing up from a pompous brat to becoming a pompous firelord

    Anywho, I was reaally wondering after reading all those pages: Who's story did you like the most Hmmmm????

    Little note on the side: i noticed that Eragon was one of your favorite movies. And i say DID YOU READ THE BOOKS AT ALL. The movie almost makes a spoof out of the books. I will never forgive the writer for letting that terrible peice of steamy pile of horse what-its make it to the movies for everyones viewing sorrow. Okay i'm done

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