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Script/Screenplay for an Avatar Movie that is CG Based (Writing test on pg 13)

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    tico1125

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    Ok I am going to log out and check on this later since I have to go home.?? My day here at work is over.?? I will review everyone's comments on the blog.?? Then I will think about who the writers are going to be.?? We might even do a poll on it.?? I know I can do the sound part and some other stuff.?? We still need the animation though and that is going to be the hard part.
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    BlindBandit

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    Okay. So, what I've read and understood so far is that this is taking place in the past, CG animated, and we are assigning jobs later on, right?

    Well, I still call storyboardist. |D Sorry...I'm feeling a bit off, I haven't been on this thread all day. Someone should organize and keep record of all these things, instead of having one look through ALL the pages.

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    electricblue18

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    I could help write if you need me to! I am an excellent writer, and portfolios take over your life! I'm from Kentucky, where we do portfolios! Does anyone else have to do portfolios in school? I HATE THEM even though I got a Distinguished on my last one...
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    BlindBandit

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    Well, I think everyone agreed assigning(Sp??) jobs once "everyone's connected".

    But you could be a big help with organizing...!

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    tico1125

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    tico1125 wrote:

    I created the below plot for if we decide to do something that takes place before the show instead. I think it is a pretty solid story. Let me know what you all think.

    Opening Scene:

    Avatar Roku lies on his deathbed in the temple. The keepers try to
    revive him but he eventually slips into the darkness. His spirit then
    leaves his body and rises into the heavens to take its permanent place in the
    spirit world.



    Somewhere within the air nation mother gives birth to a baby boy. Aang
    was born under his mother Remi and his father Tong. He is named Aang for
    his grandfather the greatest airbender known for saving the air nation from
    total anhilation by Chin the Conqueror. When Chin tried to get the
    airnomads to join his army they were blown out of town by Aang. His
    bravery gave them hope for a brighter future.



    By the age of 2 Aang shows a natural ability to airbend. His parents were
    surprised by this and took him to the Southern Air Temple. There they
    spoke with Gyatso and the other monks. (Insert a ton of dialogue.) They were amazed by his natural ability and had a hunch about Aang being the
    new Avatar. The monks took the young airbender into a room filled with
    toys. Once there Aang explored the many toys and set them aside until he
    came across four different toys. They were the relics of the
    avatar. Satisfied with their conclusion the monks agreed to raise Aang
    under the condition that they would not tell Aang he was the Avatar until his
    16th birthday when he would be able to make the decision of staying with them
    or moving on.



    Years went by and by the age of 11 Aang was told of his parents story though
    not of him being the Avatar. Aang now being a master of airbending
    decided that he wanted to try and find his parents. So he became a nomad
    himself and travelled. On his journey he met a boy named Bumi in the city
    of Omashu. While there he
    learned many things about survival in the world. They used the mail
    system as transportation around the city as Aang and Bumi used their bending
    skills to control the chutes. After some time Aang learned of a sighting
    of his parents in the Fire Nation. So he left Omashu and travelled into
    the fire nation. While he was there he met Kuzon where they got into all
    sorts of trouble. He learned his way around the fire nation and he also
    learned of his parents' stay. All the while as Aang travelled around he
    learned of the many adventures that his parents took to only find out that
    there last one ended in their death. (Their many adventures include
    riding: hopping llamas, surf on the backs of giant koi fish, penguin sledding,
    and riding hog-monkeys. All of which Aang points out to Katara and Sokka
    in the Return of the Avatar episode. Nice tie in right?) After
    discovering their death Aang returns to the Southern Air Temple to report his
    findings and rejoin the monks. While their he teaches the younger monks
    the air bending techniques.



    All the while the one monk that motioned for Aang to be sent to the Eastern Air Temple
    plots the fall of the Air Nation. He communicates with Sozin to get the
    plans rolling. He does this because he wants to be deemed the High
    Monk. So he plans the strike against the Southern Temple
    first. He wants to get control over Aang so that they can control the
    Avatar in order to not have any interference.



    The other monks sense his deception and call Aang forward to reveal that he is
    the Avatar. Gyatso helps Aang cope with it and also trains him in higher
    level thought. Together they play Pai Sho and Gyatso give subtle hints to
    Aang about the White Lotus Secret Society. After refusing Aang's lesson
    to the evil monk (Gyatso knew of his plans to turn Aang against them.) the monk
    then went to the high monks and asked to have Aang moved to the Eastern Air Temple. Aang overhears everything and decides to leave on his own again.



    Gyatso comes to find the note from Aang while he tries to
    tell Aang that he would not let them take him away. He takes the note to the other monks. When they decipher its meaning the rest of
    them begin to setup a search party for him.



    Meanwhile the evil monk goes to the Sozin and tells him what
    is happening. Sozin sees the opportunity
    for them to strike at the southern temple and other areas of the world just as
    a comet is passing by he finds that it increases the power of fire
    benders. Many were caught off guard as
    the fire nation army attacked them A
    huge fight takes place as the young monks die off easily.



    Elsewhere Aang battles in the storm but becomes lost in the
    iceberg.



    While the battle rages many of the airbenders are able to
    fend off the fire nation army. Then just
    as war nears the end the comet begins to pass over. Instantly charged by its shear power the fire
    nation strikes harder breaking down the defenses of all the cities they were
    attacking. The airnomads are overwhelmed
    and before they are annihilated some of them escape to warn the other temples
    of what was going on. Some were
    intercepted and killed by the fire nation but others made it when it was too
    late. The air nation had fallen and many
    of the air nomads disappeared into hiding.



    After a few years Sozin had a child name Azulon whom he
    trained to be a great general. Azulon
    took on his father???s war like traits and continued the war. When his father passed away he took over as
    the Fire Lord and led the army to many victories. His two sons Ozai and Iroh helped the army to
    strategize the war. They attacked the
    southern water tribe and destroyed the great city to only a few remaining
    people where a small village was formed with Gran Gran, Sokka, and Katara. During the great battle Sokka and Katara lost
    their mother but the many waterbenders of their tribe were able to battle off
    the fire nation. Hakoda was their father
    and he showed fierce determination to protect what was left of the tribe. So he drove the fight away from the South
    Pole.



    Azulon saw the minor losses as a victory because he knew
    that they would not be a great threat to the Fire Nation any longer. He then sent his son Iroh to the Earth Kingdom capital of Ba Sing Se to
    sack the city in the name of the fire nation. For months they strategize the plan of attack on the city.



    Meanwhile Ozai stayed at home in the fire nation helping
    the generals formulate other plans for the Fire Nation???s success. With his wife Ursa they bore 2 children names
    Zuko and Azula. Azula showed great
    promise as a fire bender where Zuko struggled with his abilities. Azula attended a private school where she
    learned many things that increase her cunning skills. Zuko learned most of everything from his
    mother. The children competed for their
    father???s affection. Azula won all the
    time while Zuko was barely recognized for any of his efforts.



    Iroh sent many letters of his fight with Ba Sing Se but news
    swiftly came when he lost the war because of his retreat over his fallen
    son. He returned from war a broken
    general.



    He drank heavily and attempted suicide. (This is when he has his encounter with the
    spirit world.) He gets so close to
    death that while he is in the spirit world he speaks with his son. His son convinces him to go on because he is
    still needed for Zuko.



    Meanwhile Ozai visits with Azulon to talk about revoking
    Iroh???s birth right. Azulon tells him
    that he must suffer the came kind of loss and for him to kill Zuko. He agrees. Ursa finds out about the deal from Azula when Azula reports it to
    Zuko. She pulls her aside and verifies
    the whole story. She then approaches
    Ozai about this and challenges Azulon to Agni Kai in place of Zuko???s
    death. She puts it so that if she wins
    then Zuko gets to live and Ozai get???s the birth right but she would banish herself. (She does this because she has been plotting
    Zuko to take the thrown so that he can just end the war and the world could
    return to peace.) So the agni kai takes
    place and Ursa wins. Azulon signs over
    the birth right to Ozai and Ursa leaves the fire nation. Prior to her leaving she tells Zuko that she
    has done everything for him.



    The next day Zuko finds out about his mother leaving and
    Azulon dying. Iroh comes out of a coma
    to find that his brother is to become the fire lord. He finds a note left behind from Ursa in
    regards to everything that has been happening. She asks him to take over teaching Zuko the ways of the righteousness. She knew he was changed man from the loss of
    his son because of his active communication with her. He stops his drinking and changes to drinking
    tea to kick his bad habit. His life was
    renewed with his new task. Ursa gave him
    the energy to go on in hopes that there would be peace one day.

    At this point the story picks up with Zuko???s story and
    Katara???s story with her learning about her skills with water bending.



    ??



    Let me know if you want more.

    ??

    Ok everyone. The above is the basis for the storyline. I think we could use it to determine the writers. So here is the deal.

    Write something that works on what we are trying to
    accomplish. Use what I wrote up above as a basis to
    start from. Give me a bit of dialogue from one of the scenes and some
    naration of the scene itself. I think you all have some great potential to be a writer for this movie. However we have to take the best fit. Thank you for all of your input as it is greatly
    appreciated.

    Please post your submissions after this post.?? I will check on this in the morning. By then hopefully we will have what we need to judge from. Please keep the submission to something about 2 pages long (if you are using MS Word as the editor.) I will then make a poll on this thread for the best five.?? From there everyone will vote for the best one.?? We will take the top three.?? When the writers are determined then I have software to enable us to write the script. I will try and get it to you.

    Good luck to all of you.

    ??

    Edited on 12/27/2006 5:35pm
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    BlackQT2005

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    dakota fanning would make a snazzy toph
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    BlindBandit

    [247]Dec 27, 2006
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    But we're not making live action! CG is Computer Graphics...otherwise, I've been taught terribly wrong. |D
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    Taang_Forever

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    I'm typing a scene right now, and I'll try to meet the size requirement, but all I have is wordpad and it doesn't measure in pages. I'll see where it gets though.
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    Taang_Forever

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    BlindBandit wrote:
    But we're not making live action! CG is Computer Graphics...otherwise, I've been taught terribly wrong. |D


    But Dakota's cool.. have you seen her acting? The kid is like a mutant!
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    andreitayehp

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    Actually, I think the CG should be based in actors... it would be an easier work, mixing the animated show character features with actors features, for example, a Topk with Dakota Fanning features...
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    electricblue18

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    I'll write something tonight. Night is when I work best, and I think about things the most. Right now, I'm not at my best, even though it's 9:22 here. Maybe I'll start about 12:00 or 1:00.
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    Taang_Forever

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    andreitayehp wrote:
    Actually, I think the CG should be based in actors... it would be an easier work, mixing the animated show character features with actors features, for example, a Toph with Dakota Fanning features...


    I'm not sure. Doing the movie live action would be a problem because of who we would get for actors... I doubt we could pay huge stars to star in it. And I'm not sure there are many people out there who would be willing to act for us. And special effects would be another thing... I think CG is our best shot at this moment.
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    andreitayehp

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    It seems you didn't understood me at all! I didn't say that! I said that our characters fromCG should look like some actors, not to contract them... I'm 16, not 10!, of course I know that! (and I'm pretty mature, by the way, the eldest sister in my family... the youngest in the class...?? )

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    Strix_Moonwing

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    Okay here's my post. It's my version of the opening scene...

    Opening Scene: (scene opens with the Avatar theme playing while the camera is following a hawk over the ocean, which is reddish because of the sunset. The hawk flies upward and we see Crescent Island. The hawk flies lower as it flies towards the tall tower of the Fire Temple. The hawk flies towards an open window, but flaps away in surprise as a bright light is flashed)

    Scene 1: (As the light flashes, the camera zooms inside the room while a man lies dieing in a small cot. A Fire sage sits in a chair and looks over the man. The man coughs and the Fire Sage leans over, worried.)

    ??Fire Sage: (in worried whisper) Avatar Roku! (turns to a feeble man behind him) What are you doing standing around? Can???t you see Avatar Roku need assistances!? Make yourself useful!

    Avatar Roku: (raises hand weakly) No???I need nothing.

    Fire Sage: But sir, your condition is getting worse. The Water Tribes are sending their best healers. In a day or two they shall???.

    Avatar Roku: Healers can do nothing. Even if they could I would not let them???(pauses) The spirit of Kyoshi has spoken to me. The flames I have lit for so many years as Avatar have finally died. It is time for me to join the avatars before me so I can light the fire once again???..

    ??Fire Sage: (grabs Avatar Roku???s hand) No???.the world needs the avatar! More than ever! Please sir???.

    Avatar Roku: (shudders silently) The world shall never be without an Avatar???.never???.(eyes close for last time as the candles by his bed die out.)

    (The Fire Sage bows his head as more Fire keepers rush into the room. We can barely hear them whispering to eachother as the camera zooms out of the room and follows the flight of the hawk as it glides across the red skies.)

    ??Scene 2: (The camera glides across the ocean, which is now dark with nighttime. It keeps going until it reaches the cliffs and angles upwards at a fast pace. It keeps going upward until it is above the mountain peaks and we see an Air nation temple, windows glowing with the light from inside. We zoom in until we are inside a dimly lit room with a dark haired woman, lying on her back on some blankets, deeply in labor. A bald young man is on his knees besides her, holding her hand while some female monks are helping her.)

    Man: (brushing a lock of hair from woman???s face) Don???t worry; it???ll be over soon, Remi.

    Remi: (face softens as she looks at man) Thank you, Tong. (her faces twists in face and she squeezes tightly on Tong???s hand as she growls in pain)

    Tong: (face is also twisted in pain as Remi continues to squeeze his hand, tighter.) I can???t feel my hand???..

    Female monk: (baths Remi???s forehead with wet cloth) The little one is coming, dear.

    Tong: (winces as Remi squeezes hand harder) Uh, can you make it come a little faster? (gets hit on head with staff)

    Female monk: You don???t rush babies!

    Remi: (screams in pain. Both Tong and female monk look at her in surprise) Coming???.he???s coming!

    Female monk: (growls at a female monk apprentice) Didn???t you hear her? The baby is coming! Get some towels and water, now Kayo!

    Kayo: (bows head, nervously) Yes, ma! (rushes out room)

    Scene 3: (We watch as Kayo, the little female monk apprentice, rush down the temple stair, running past many other female monks along the way. She rushes inside a room and disappears. A second later, she reappears with a armful of blankets and a bowl of water. She carefully walks back towards the staircase and passes a large wooden door. She hears voices coming from it and stops.)

    Voice one: Avatar Roku is dead???

    (Kayo presses ear towards door)

    Voice two: No, it can???t be true.

    Voice one: But, it is. The Fire Sage sent a message hawk an hour ago???.died at sunset.

    Voice two: Then who is next?

    Voice one: What do you mean?

    Voice two: I mean, who is the next Avatar? The world is at war. We can not be without an Avatar.

    Voice one: Nobody knows. All we know is that the child shall be an air bender.

    Voice two: How do you know that?

    Voice one: It has always been like that! It is part of the cycle. First is air, then is water, then is earth, then fire???.and back to air. Avatar Roku was the flame that lit the way???now it is the new Avatar???s turn to blow us in the right direction.

    (Kayo???s eyes widen in shock and she lets out a small gasp at hearing that the next Avatar is an airbender.)

    Voice two: Did you hear something?

    (Kayo covers her mouth and rushes back upstairs. As she nears the room where Tong and Remi are, she hears a loud wailing. She presses her hand against the door and slowly peeks in. Through the crack in the door, she see Remi, sitting up in her bed of blankets with a small bundle in her arms. Tong has his arm folded around her looking proud while the female monk just sits back and smiles. The monk spies Kayo and gestures her in)

    Female monk: Come in child???.and see a most wonderful miracle.

    (Kayo sits on the floor, next to Remi and watches as Remi reveals a small baby boy in her arms. The baby is asleep peacefully as Kayo gazes at it in wonder.)

    Kayo: What is the baby???s name?

    Tong: Tong junior, of course! (gets smacked again by female monk)

    Female monk: (scoffs) Not on your life, mister!

    ??Remi: (chuckles softly) I shall name him Aang???.after his grandfather, the greatest airbender ever known.

    Tong; (grumbles) I still think???..(stops as Female monk glares at him) Aang???Aang is good!

    Remi: (holds the baby close) Aang???.my little Aang.

    Tong: (hugs his wife and son close) Our little airbender???..

    Kayo: (remembers what she heard earlier) ???The next Avatar shall be an airbender???shall blow us in the right direction.??? (whispers softly) Aang???the next Avatar.

    Sorry if I made any mistakes...post more later!

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    Taang_Forever

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    Oh, well then, I look like a fool again. So you're saying since we can't do it live action... okay, so if we WERE doing it live action, Dakota would have been Toph, right? But since it's not gonna be live action, when the animation is done, instead of making the characters look more like they do on the show, we should make them look like the actors instead? So that the CG looks like Dakota dressed as Toph?
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    BlindBandit

    [256]Dec 27, 2006
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    electricblue18 wrote:
    I'll write something tonight. Night is when I work best, and I think about things the most. Right now, I'm not at my best, even though it's 9:22 here. Maybe I'll start about 12:00 or 1:00.

    *high fives* Ya rly!! I can't work during the day, too eventful ;_;?? As for the Look-a-Like part, that might be a good idea..whoever's in charge of that team may have to think it over. But I think we're making good progress!

    @ Strix_: That's good so far, but make sure to PM it to Tico for convenience.??

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    Taang_Forever

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    Wait, in what format does our writing have to be? Play format? If so I'm writing mine wrong...
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    BlindBandit

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    Play format is the way to go, dude. But I think you could rewrite it once you've finished the original, so dun worry.
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    Taang_Forever

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    Well, it's just that I stopped writing in play format some time ago, and I don't know how good I may still be at it...
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    BlindBandit

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    Well, stick to writing normally for now. I might be able to help when your done. Good luck "3
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