Avatar: The Last Airbender: Script/Screenplay for an Avatar Movie that is CG Based (Writing test on pg 13)

Taang_Forever
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That heart thing is really deep man...
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tico1125

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electricblue18 wrote:

hehe... It's kinda long, but I think it's ok for now. I might right a story scene later. I'm better at those.

This was the scene I used:

Meanwhile the evil monk goes to
the Sozin and tells him what

is happening. Sozin sees the opportunity

for them to strike at the southern temple and other areas of the world just as

a comet is passing by he finds that it increases the power of fire

benders. Many were caught off guard as

the fire nation army attacked them. A

huge fight takes place as the young monks die off easily.

Fire Nation Palace,
War Chamber, Day 1, Evening

*The Evil Monk has arrived at the Palace in secrecy, and
they are talking about the plans for the invasion of the air temples.*

Evil Monk: (Whispers) The day has come, Fire Lord Sozin. The
Air Temples will fall in unison. There is nothing they can do to protect
themselves from you, great Fire Lord.

Sozin: (Intimidating voice) You speak as a great admiral,
yet you seem to have the courage of a rabbit when it is about to be eaten. The
rabbit hides in fear, while the great predator rules the lands.

*Evil Monk bows to Sozin*

Evil Monk: (Cowardly) B-b-b-but sir, I AM a great admiral. I
am the fiercest airbender in all of the lands! I will stand beside your armies
as you wipe out the rest of my pathetic people!

Sozin: That is where you are wrong. Guards, take this
deceiving traitor where he belongs. In the dungeon!

*Evil Monk gives Sozin a baffled look*

Evil Monk: (Confused) Wh-wh-what!?!? I just gave you the
most valuable information of the Air Nomads that I know, and you BETRAY ME!?

Sozin: You have given us valuable information, and we thank
you for that, but we know how you lied to your people. We know that you will
betray our people, as you did your own.

*The Evil Monk is dragged off into the dark, vague dungeons
as he screams in fear*

Fire Nation Palace,
War Chamber, Day 2, Morning

*Sozin is giving a speech to his admirals, who wait in silence
as they listen. The admirals will be the first to go off into battle for the
first fight in the war.*

Sozin: You, you are the admirals that will take out the Air
Nomads. YOU are the great conquerors that will bring down the Air Nomads. ALL
OF YOU will achieve the ranks as great men who fought against the Air Nomads.
Today, we will begin our journey to the Air Temples, where we will fight the
first battles of the great war, and we will be VICTORIOUS!

*Sozin sits back down, and bows his head in silence*

Admiral Zhoka: You are right, Fire Lord Sozin. This is the
year that we will invade the temples, and destroy the Air Nomads once and for
all.

Sozin: The first temple to fall will be where the traitor
came from, and where the avatar is??? the Southern Air Temple. The Southern Air
Temple has stood for many years. This is the strongest temple, so it will be
best to catch them off guard while we have the chance. Also, each of our
soldiers will have the strength of ten firebenders. (Shouts) We are INVINCIBLE!

*Admirals give Sozin a baffled look*

Admiral Zhoka: Wh-what do you mean!? We are not THAT strong.
We do not have enough chi enhancing tea to give to all of our armies!

Sozin: (Whispers) But I have made a discovery??? a discovery
that will make us unbeatable to the rest of the world! All of you will see
during the last Air Nomad battle. It will finish off the Air Nomads??? but for
now, we must invade the Southern Air Temple, the strongest and most fortified
temple of them all! There, at that first battle, WE WILL SHOW THE WORLD HOW
MUCH DESTRUCTION THE FIRE NATION CAN DO!

*Admirals salute Sozin, and they all walk out of the chamber
in silence, knowing that they will be leaving that night for the Southern Air
Temple*

*After journeying across the ocean to the Southern Air
Temple, they reach the base of the Potola Mountain Range. They are in a large
green field with wild flowers all around. Over 5,000 soldiers waited in silence
for the war horn to sound, which signaled the invasion.*

Invasion of the Southern Air Temple,
Day 1

*Camera zooms in on the Fire Nation army with all of the men
training for the invasion. Admiral Zhoka walks around the camp, watching the
training, and perfecting the moves of the new recruits.*

Admiral Zhoka: No, no, you have it all wrong young private!
It is all in the breath. It does not matter how hard you punch, it is all in
the breath. You take in the oxygen and you???

*Messenger runs up to Admiral Zhoka, panting*

Messenger: (Panting) Admiral Zhoka, Admiral Zhoka!

Zhoka: What, what is it lad!?!?

Messenger: (Worried) It???s the Air Nomads, sir! They spotted
two young privates in the mountains and they took them into the temple!

Zhoka: (Fierce) ROUND UP THE LIGHTNING TEAM! THEY MUST BE
THE FRONT OF OUR BATTLE!

*Zhoka takes out the war horn, and mumbles to himself about
the greatest battle ever fought. He looks up brutally, and blows the horn. The
Fire Nation army gathers behind him, with the Lightning Team up front, ready to
take out any wall that stands in their path.*

*Zhoka took out the war horn once again, and blew it yet
again. Generals of the smaller battalions of the army blew on their bison
whistles. From the nearest mountain, hundreds of bison came swarming in, but it
was not what they expected. These bison were carrying airbenders, and in the
front of them all, was Monk Gyatso.

Monk Gyatso: (Shouting) You will NOT take our home away from
us! We questioned the soldiers, and knew you were here! We may not have all of
our airbenders, but you will still have to take our land by force! You will
face the airbender???s wrath!

Zhoka: Quick! Get to the trebuchets! It does not matter if
the bison are killed; we will find a way up into the Air Temple!
Lightning Team, STRIKE WITH ME!

*Zhoka and the team of lightningbenders kneeled down on one
knee. They all took deep breaths, and put all of the fury that had been inside
them for so long into the lightning.*

*Thirty of the largest strikes of lightning ever created
headed straight for Monk Gyatso, but Monk Gyatso knew what to do. He took out
his glider, and he flew straight up towards the aqua blue sky. He headed down,
and created a large vortex as he dived. The vortex took in all of the
lightning, and shot it back out towards the Fire Nation Army. The benders
quickly deflected the lightning, and they were right back to attacking.*

*Gyatso was pulling out of his dive, when suddenly, one bolt
of lightning from Zhoka struck Gyatso in the leg. Gyatso crashed into the
ground, and airbenders surrounded him, trying to protect him from harm. They
begged for mercy. They didn???t want the airbender killed. They pleaded, until
finally a bison came and carried Gyatso off into the mountains.*

Zhoka: (shouts) General Voy, get one of those bison and take
some soldiers to follow that bison!

Voy: Right away sir!

*General Voy and the rest of his battalion got on top of
some Air Bison, and they headed off after Gyatso. Several airbenders tried to
get the bison to come down, but they already knew that this battle was lost.*

*The airbenders began retreating into the mountains to find
shelter and refuge, but the firebenders kept on coming. There were just too
many??? the airbenders could not hold them back.*

*Many of the airbenders died in the battlefield, but some
retreated to the Southern Air Temple. The firebenders took the bison that were
left behind, and they followed Voy into the mountains. Hundreds of firebenders
that got to the temple surrounded it. Children hid in the deepest parts of the
temple, where they could not be found by the firebenders.*

*Within minutes, the firebenders brutally killed the rest of
the airbending monks, and they searched for Monk Gyatso. When they found him,
they saw him lying on the ground, panting. Gyatso called upon the spirits to
help him, but he did not wait for a response. He stood up on his burnt leg, and
he reached for his staff, he began airbending like no other has seen before. He
created huge tornadoes that shook the ground. He must have wiped out hundreds
of firebenders, but more kept on coming. He could not go on much longer. Zhoka
walked up to the worn out Gyatso.*

Zhoka: (Whispers) You have fought well, but your people are
a dying race. Understand this before you die. Fire is THE superior element.
This is the first battle of many. The Fire Nation will destroy the Air Nomads,
the Earth Kingdom, and the Water Tribes. We will
rule the world.

Gyatso: (Whispers while panting) You may take the world for
your own one day, but you must know that there is always going to be the idea
of a rebellion. Not all of the people will follow your command. My people may
become extinct, but the Avatar will return. The Avatar will restore peace to
this world. It may be in one year or one hundred, but the world will one day
live in harmony once again. Fire is NOT the superior element. There is no
superior element, for we are all equal. I shall die fighting for my nation.

*One small tear trickled down the side of Gyatso???s face.*

*With that, Zhoka charged up the lightning in his body, and
with a final strike, killed Gyatso.*

*Zhoka stood on the mountain, overlooking the field
triumphantly. He looked around and he yelled to the other men.*

Zhoka: This day, we have taken the Southern Air Temple! They
could not hold back the superior element! We will destroy the strongholds of
the Air Nomads, Earth Kingdom, and Water
Tribes! We will be undefeatable!

*The rest of the men shouted in conquest.*

*Among the green battlefield, however, there was no longer
peace. Blood of children and monks was strewn across the field. It was no
longer green, but blood red. Hundreds of bodies were scattered across the
field, both Air Nomad and Fire Nation.*

*Just then, Zhoka heard the words of his father. ???Remember
son, the world is not separated into four nations, it is already one. We are
all one people, separated by our different styles of life. We keep each other
in balance. The nations must stick together and keep balance so we can live in
harmony.???*

*Balance, Zhoka
thought, balance keeps us alive. Without balance, the world will go into
corruption and chaos.*

??*A tear stroked his face. Zhoka had realized his brutal
actions, and he fled for a bison. The firebenders began shouting after him,
asking where he was going, but those firebenders never saw the admiral again???*

This was very good.?? It is top 5 material.?? There is only one hole in the story.?? It is a small one though.?? Based on the place where Aang found Gyatso's body in the Southern Air Temple episode he was in a building and was surrounded by many dead firebenders.?? Therefore Gyatso was in a huge battle and eventually became overwhelmed by the soldiers.?? So I think if you changed his dying scene to something like below it will flow with the current story.

Gyatso with his injured leg battled fiercely against the firebenders as he was slowly backed into the store house of the monks' farming.?? The battle raged on as more than twenty soldiers were eliminated before the wrath of Gyatso.?? Suddenly with a surge five men grabbed Gyatso arms, legs, and covered his mouth as they pinned him against the wall. ** Zhoka enters and your story continues**

Overall the story was very good with the exception of the blood filled fields.?? Lol.?? I did like the Lightening Squad.?? Good job!

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tico1125 wrote:

Taang_Forever wrote:

I did mine in story format, but If required, I will turn it into play format. Here it is, and the paragraph at the top is what I wrote about.
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By the age of 2 Aang shows a natural ability to airbend. His parents were
surprised by this and took him to the Southern Air Temple. There they
spoke with Gyatso and the other monks. (Insert a ton of dialogue.) They were amazed by his natural ability and had a hunch about Aang being the
new Avatar. The monks took the young airbender into a room filled with
toys. Once there Aang explored the many toys and set them aside until he
came across four different toys. They were the relics of the
avatar. Satisfied with their conclusion the monks agreed to raise Aang
under the condition that they would not tell Aang he was the Avatar until his
16th birthday when he would be able to make the decision of staying with them
or moving on.
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(This starts off a little weird because it implies something has already happened before it, but this is the dialogue part between Aang's parents and the monks)

Remi and Tong were then led into a meditating room within the temple. There, monk Gyatso and others awaited their arrival, eager about the boy coming. They could not be sure yet, but they wondered if this new boy might possibly be the next avatar. From the stories Remi and Tong had chosen to share about their son's airbending abilities, they were quite curious to observe for themselves.

As they were led through the long hall, Remi looked down at her son walking between her and his father. The young boy looked up at her mother with large happy eyes and a smile. The little boy also looked over to his father, who also looked down at him with happyness. Today, the fate of this young boy would be decided, and whatever his fate was, his two parents could not be more proud. There was no turning back now.

They arrived at the end of the hall, where two large double doors stood, leading into the meditating room on the other side. The monk leading them quickly used his airbending abilities to open the lock sealing the doors. Seals retracted and spirals spun, unlocking it. The two doors slowly began to open and the room inside was revealed. A row of 15 monks sat cross-legged on the far end. In the middle of them sat a familiar face to the two parents. They aproached the monks with their son following close behind, whom was looking around at the size of the room. When the two parents were within speaking distance of the monks, they took a moment to show their respect with a quick bow. The monks did a small bow as well from their sitting position.

"Thank you for coming," spoke the middle monk. "Please, sit down." The two parents sat on the floor and crossed their legs, followed by their son who saw their example.

"Thank you for having us, Master Gyatso," said the boy's father. "I hope that this meeting has not been much trouble for you to have."

"Not at all. When we heard your news we were immediately interested, and we would have called this meeting whether you knew your son was the avatar, or simply a very promising young airbender. From the stories that we have heard from you about your son, he certainly seems to be quite special. For him to be able to bend air already at such a young age, it is truly a remarkable feat. Perhaps the remarkable feat."

"That is what we wondered on the night of his birth ourselves," informed Remi. "Over the two years of our son's life he has often displayed his abilities. From jumping to the top of the temple, to drying himself after a bath... He's a very remarkable young boy." Remi looked at her son with pride, not hearing the bit of chatter between the monks who were quite interested.

"We would like to see him display his abilities," spoke Gyatso. The two parents looked up in some surprise, though they had expected this request. They smiled and looked down at their son who was rocking back and forth.

"Aang, do you want to slide?" Tong softly asked his son who immediately smiled at the suggestion and nodded quickly. The Monks looked at each other in confusion and set their eyes on the small two year old. The little boy walked out closer to the monks so that he was between them and his parents. He sat down on the ground again and quickly a strong air current formed under him that pushed him forward at a remarkable speed. The monks raised their arms fearing a collision but the boy quickly turned away from them and began to slide across the entire room using his airbending, squealing with delight the entire way. The monks gasped in fear when it looked like the young boy might crash against the wall of the circular room, but to their surprise the little boy was blown high upward by a strong current instead. Along the walls the young boy continued to slide over the air current pushing him forward. The monks were more than amazed by this display. The boy could not only bend, but he had incredible control over everything he did. The monks fell into another small chatter as the little boy came plummeting down from the top of the room, only to be saved by a mini tornado of his own creation at the last possible second. He laughed with content at all the fun he was having. Fun! This impressed the monks further. The boy was not even trying...

"That's something we've chosen to call his 'air slider'," said the young boy's father. "And that's only a fraction of what he does all the time, I assure you."

"Hmm... his abilities have proven to be more than even we expected," replied Monk Gyatso. "He is certainly a very gifted young child." All 15 monks stood. "There is one thing that we would like him to do for us, if you are willing to let him."

"Of course, Master Gyatso, what is it?" asked Tong curiously.

"Follow us and you shall see."

The 15 monks then exited the meditating room, followed by the curious parents and their playful child. The monks led the three of them back through the long hallway they had entered through, and out across a large courtyard outside of the meditating area where several other young airbenders trained. The young boy looked at them all in curiosity as to what they were doing and why there were so many of them. He quickly caught up with his parents when he saw that he had been falling behind, and reached them at the exact time that they achieved their destination. In front were two double doors, similar to the ones leading into the meditating room. Monk Gyatso took it upon himself to open this door with his airbending, calling the attention of the many other airbenders around, and commencing several whispers throughout the quickly formed crowd.

"Wow, you think they found him already?" came one conversation. "If they're going into that room it must be pretty big," commented another voice. The much younger airbenders, unknowing to the test the room inside represented, simply said things like, "I wonder what he's gonna get?" "Oh, he's so lucky!"

The monks, the boy and his parents entered the open doors which closed behind them. This was a shorter hallway than before, and what it led to was one of the happiest moments of the young airbender's life. At the end of the hallway, a large circular room was filled with an unimaginably large amount of toys. The young airbender squaked with delight, and jumped right into the knee-deep pool of toys.

"Wait! Aang!" called his parents a second too late.

"It's okay. Let him," spoke Gyatso. "This is the test we reffered to earlier."

The two parents looked at each other in confusion. "Uh, toys are the test?" asked Tong.

"You could say that."

"Could you explain this to us, if you don't mind, Master Gyatso?" asked Remi.

"With pleasure. You see, among these many hundreds of toys, lie four special ones. Whether young Aang chooses these four toys out of all the rest, or does not, it will be able to tell us if he is indeed the avatar, or simply a very talented airbender."

"I'm afraid we don't understand..." Remi said. "Why are the four toys special?"

"A very good question. You see, the four special toys hidden here somewhere, are special because they are the only ones here that have once belonged to the Avatar in the past..." explained Gyatso as he watched young Aang swimming across all the toys. He saw that he had already chosen one of the special four. "There..." he pointed out to the others. "He has already recognized the one he holds... He finds it familiar." Remi and Tong looked at each other in amazement, while the other monks chatted between themselves again. "If young Aang does turn out to be the Avatar, I hope that you will be prepared to relinquish him."

"Yes," replied Tong. "We have discussed it before, and have decided to have him live here, so that he may receive training. It won't be easy to let him go... but we knew that this day might one day come... and it seems that day, may be this one..." Monk Gyatso raised an eyebrow as he saw young Aang grab yet another of the four special toys.

"There is something else we must tell you," began Monk Gyatso. "Though young Aang may well turn out to be the avatar's newest re-incarnation, he shall not be told so until he reaches the mature age of 16."

"Why sixteen?" asked Tong.

"Because at that age, young Aang will be able to make his choice. Whether he wishes to stay with us and continue his training in mastering the elements as he has done a thousand times before-- or whether he wishes to not be part of it, and be allowed to live life in his own way. But that is not all. At the age of 16 we trust that he will fully understand his duties as the Avatar, and make a wiser choice of the path he wishes to follow." The young airbender called attention yet again, as he chose the third of the four toys, and before long the fourth. Monk Gyatso looked with a smiling face at the two parents. "Congratulations. Young Aang-- is the next Avatar."

Simply AWESOME!?? I had goosebumps through the whole thing.?? Definitely going to be among the top 5!

I thought it was great, too, especially the last part. I would also like to add that the four toys that Aang choose were a turtle, a string propelled device, a hog-monkey, and a drum. Just thought you'd like to know.

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^ Thanks for the toy info. I wanted to describe them but I didn't know what they were. Thanks though! If I get to be one of the writers I'll be sure to add them. ^_^
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Taang_Forever wrote:

^ Thanks for the toy info. I wanted to describe them but I didn't know what they were. Thanks though! If I get to be one of the writers I'll be sure to add them. ^_^

You're welcome!^-^ If you need lots of good info, go to Wikipedia. org. They have lots of info about....well....ANYTHING!XD They have a great Avatar article.
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tico1125

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Taang_Forever wrote:

Sleepy hollow had a lot of beheading and it was PG-13. Or was it R...?

Anyway, I have some stuff I have to do around the house today, and possibly tomorrow and the day after that. (I promised I would paint the Kitchen before my vacation ends) So tico, if you could tell me when we're gonna begin writing to divide up my time and all, that'd be great. (Assuming I get chosen. And thank you for your review, I wasn't sure if it was gonna be good enough. ^_^)

Well I think we will have the winners determined hopefully by Saturday.?? Then we can get started by Sunday or next week.

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Okay, I'll be sure to do that.
Well I think we will have the winners determined hopefully by Saturday.?? Then we can get started by Sunday or next week.
That's great! I'm sure I'll be done by then.
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tico1125
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Ok for now I am fully up to date on the submissions.?? I will check for more later today.?? I am at work right now and I am juggling this and my job.?? So I will check back in a couple hours during my lunch.?? Have a great day and keep up the good work.
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electricblue18 wrote:

hehe... It's kinda long, but I think it's ok for now. I might right a story scene later. I'm better at those.

This was the scene I used:

Fire Nation Palace,
War Chamber, Day 1, Evening

*The Evil Monk has arrived at the Palace in secrecy, and
they are talking about the plans for the invasion of the air temples.*

Evil Monk: (Whispers) The day has come, Fire Lord Sozin. The
Air Temples will fall in unison. There is nothing they can do to protect
themselves from you, great Fire Lord.

*Evil Monk bows to Sozin*

Evil Monk: (Cowardly) B-b-b-but sir, I AM a great admiral. I
am the fiercest airbender in all of the lands! I will stand beside your armies
as you wipe out the rest of my pathetic people!

Sozin: That is where you are wrong. Guards, take this
deceiving traitor where he belongs. In the dungeon!

*Evil Monk gives Sozin a baffled look*

Evil Monk: (Confused) Wh-wh-what!?!? I just gave you the
most valuable information of the Air Nomads that I know, and you BETRAY ME!?

Sozin: You have given us valuable information, and we thank
you for that, but we know how you lied to your people. We know that you will
betray our people, as you did your own.

*The Evil Monk is dragged off into the dark, vague dungeons
as he screams in fear*

Fire Nation Palace,
War Chamber, Day 2, Morning

*Sozin is giving a speech to his admirals, who wait in silence
as they listen. The admirals will be the first to go off into battle for the
first fight in the war.*

*Sozin sits back down, and bows his head in silence*

Admiral Zhoka: You are right, Fire Lord Sozin. This is the
year that we will invade the temples, and destroy the Air Nomads once and for
all.

*Admirals give Sozin a baffled look*

Admiral Zhoka: Wh-what do you mean!? We are not THAT strong.
We do not have enough chi enhancing tea to give to all of our armies!

*Admirals salute Sozin, and they all walk out of the chamber
in silence, knowing that they will be leaving that night for the Southern Air
Temple*

Invasion of the Southern Air Temple,
Day 1

*Camera zooms in on the Fire Nation army with all of the men
training for the invasion. Admiral Zhoka walks around the camp, watching the
training, and perfecting the moves of the new recruits.*

Admiral Zhoka: No, no, you have it all wrong young private!
It is all in the breath. It does not matter how hard you punch, it is all in
the breath. You take in the oxygen and you???

*Messenger runs up to Admiral Zhoka, panting*

Messenger: (Panting) Admiral Zhoka, Admiral Zhoka!

Zhoka: What, what is it lad!?!?

Messenger: (Worried) It???s the Air Nomads, sir! They spotted
two young privates in the mountains and they took them into the temple!

Zhoka: (Fierce) ROUND UP THE LIGHTNING TEAM! THEY MUST BE
THE FRONT OF OUR BATTLE!

Zhoka: Quick! Get to the trebuchets! It does not matter if
the bison are killed; we will find a way up into the Air Temple!
Lightning Team, STRIKE WITH ME!

*Zhoka and the team of lightningbenders kneeled down on one
knee. They all took deep breaths, and put all of the fury that had been inside
them for so long into the lightning.*

Zhoka: (shouts) General Voy, get one of those bison and take
some soldiers to follow that bison!

Voy: Right away sir!

*The airbenders began retreating into the mountains to find
shelter and refuge, but the firebenders kept on coming. There were just too
many??? the airbenders could not hold them back.*

*One small tear trickled down the side of Gyatso???s face.*

*With that, Zhoka charged up the lightning in his body, and
with a final strike, killed Gyatso.*

*Zhoka stood on the mountain, overlooking the field
triumphantly. He looked around and he yelled to the other men.*

*The rest of the men shouted in conquest.*

*Balance, Zhoka
thought, balance keeps us alive. Without balance, the world will go into
corruption and chaos.*

This is nice but the evil monk is Afiko, he wasn't imprisioned, and thet attacked all of temples simultaneosly(sp?). Sorry if someone's already pointed this out. What happened to mine and Taang's spirit idea?

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tico, there is a part in the plot where you mention Iroh heavily drinking and thoughts of commiting suicide...I don't think that really is appropiate for this, unless we change him into a state of depression in a different way. Like not caring for anything that might happen to him or any of his soldiers until he finds out about Ursula leaving and Zuko's need for love, as he already knows Zuko's relationship with his father. Then he realizes that he needs to get over his son's death and try to take care of Zuko as if he were his own son.
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This past idea is really good, but we already know how it will end. All we're doing is making up what we thought would've happened. My first fanfic was a rewrite and it flopped, but my new one is doing great because its original. I'm not bashing the past plot but Taang and I had a great idea. If Iroh and Bumi die in the series, then make Zuko the firelord and don't put Bumi in the movie. Whatever you all want to do though.
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confucioussayhi wrote:

This past idea is really good, but we already know how it will end. All we're doing is making up what we thought would've happened. My first fanfic was a rewrite and it flopped, but my new one is doing great because its original. I'm not bashing the past plot but Taang and I had a great idea. If Iroh and Bumi die in the series, then make Zuko the firelord and don't put Bumi in the movie. Whatever you all want to do though.

But I liked that idea too...I don't really like the title "Avatar: the Beginning" Sounds too cliche

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Eyes_Only61646
[293]Dec 28, 2006
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**Walks out from under a rock** How'd I not notice this thread before...Anyway, I was on some other thread and they told me to come here...Looks like I missed a lot....
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obsessedchic1
[294]Dec 28, 2006
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Eyes_Only61646 wrote:

**Walks out from under a rock** How'd I not notice this thread before...Anyway, I was on some other thread and they told me to come here...Looks like I missed a lot....

Oh yeah, I was on that thread.
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Eyes_Only61646

[295]Dec 28, 2006

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obsessedchic1 wrote:

Eyes_Only61646 wrote:

**Walks out from under a rock** How'd I not notice this thread before...Anyway, I was on some other thread and they told me to come here...Looks like I missed a lot....

Oh yeah, I was on that thread.

Anyone want to help me catch up so I don't have to read 600-plus pages of posts?? **Holds out box of cookies cookies** Pleeeeeeeeeease?!

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tico1125

[296]Dec 28, 2006

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obsessedchic1 wrote:

tico, there is a part in the plot where you mention Iroh heavily drinking and thoughts of commiting suicide...I don't think that really is appropiate for this, unless we change him into a state of depression in a different way. Like not caring for anything that might happen to him or any of his soldiers until he finds out about Ursula leaving and Zuko's need for love, as he already knows Zuko's relationship with his father. Then he realizes that he needs to get over his son's death and try to take care of Zuko as if he were his own son.

That could work too.?? I was just throwing it out there.?? The whole point is that he does become depressed.?? I was just trying to tie in his spirit world experience that was mentioned in the Siege of the North Part 1.?? See that is something they have not explained in the show just yet and I am wondering if it has to do with an encounter that he had with his son.??

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[297]Dec 28, 2006

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Eyes_Only61646 wrote:

obsessedchic1 wrote:

Eyes_Only61646 wrote:

**Walks out from under a rock** How'd I not notice this thread before...Anyway, I was on some other thread and they told me to come here...Looks like I missed a lot....

Oh yeah, I was on that thread.

Anyone want to help me catch up so I don't have to read 600-plus pages of posts?? **Holds out box of cookies cookies** Pleeeeeeeeeease?!

Who could say no to cookies? Just read Tico's post in page 13 and that summarizes everything.

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tico1125

[298]Dec 28, 2006

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Eyes_Only61646 wrote:

obsessedchic1 wrote:

Eyes_Only61646 wrote:

**Walks out from under a rock** How'd I not notice this thread before...Anyway, I was on some other thread and they told me to come here...Looks like I missed a lot....

Oh yeah, I was on that thread.

Anyone want to help me catch up so I don't have to read 600-plus pages of posts?? **Holds out box of cookies cookies** Pleeeeeeeeeease?!

Ok I will do my best to help you out here.??
Here is the gist of things:
We decided to do a first movie on the past because the third season has yet to come out.?? So we have no idea what the writers of the show are going to do with the characters.?? However we do know some of the elements of the past that occurred before first epsiode of season 1.?? So our storyline for now is going to cover Aang's past up to when he meets Katara and Sokka.?? You can read the writing challenge that I have posted on page 13 of this thread.?? That will provide you an idea of what we are doing right now.?? Basically I want to gather many writers and I am going to pick the top 5 samples.?? I will then post a new thread with the top 5 and a poll to get everyone to vote for who they think is best.?? The top three will be the winners.?? From there we will start working out the whole storyline.?? I am going to see about getting some sound bits of the voices from the show.?? Then I will see if I can piece together the dialogue.?? Finally we will see about the animation.?? Once this is all done we can submit it to the show and Nick and see what happens.?? Heck this is all about fun anyways.

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[299]Dec 28, 2006
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Bit I???ve wrote about: Years went by and by the age of 11 Aang was told of his parents story though not of him being the Avatar. Aang now being a master of Airbending decided that he wanted to try and find his parents.
Beginning Of The Scene:
Aang and Gyatso are meditating in a field near the Southern Air Temple. The sky is blue and the air is peaceful; the perfect conditions for meditation. We can see the eleven year old Aang fidgeting, apparently bored. After a moment he relaxes his position, stretching his legs out and turns to Gyatso.
Aang: Monk Gyatso, I have a question.
Gyatso does not move or open his eyes.
Gyatso: It seems you have not quite grasped the concept of meditation yet, young one. (whispering) We must be quiet.
Aang: Sorry.
Aang resumes his meditation position, but after a minute stops again and turns to Gyatso.
Aang: But it???s a really good question.
Gyatso sighs and opens his eyes, also stretching out.
Gyatso: Okay then Aang, you may ask. (Gyatso smiles slightly) I suppose inner peace and tranquillity can wait.
Suddenly Aang seems unsure and embarrassed, beginning to absent-mindedly picks at the grass.
Aang: It???s just???lately, I???ve been wondering???well, about my parents.
Gyatso???s face falls at Aang???s statement. Noticing this, Aang hurriedly speaks.
Aang: I???m sorry. I shouldn???t have brought it up. It was dumb.
Gyatso sighs again and shakes his head sadly.
Gyatso: No, you have every right to ask. What do you want to know?
Aang (eagerly): Anything. Everything. Did you ever meet them?
Gyatso: Yes, a very long time ago. You were two years old, and already showing promise of a great Airbender. Your parents were good people. They wanted the best for you, so that???s why they took you here.
Aang: What were their names?
Gyatso: If memory serves, your mother was Remi and your father was Tong. You have your mother???s eyes, but your father???s chin.
Aang: And whose hair do I have?
(Both Aang and Gyatso laugh)
Aang: Have you heard from them since they left here?
Gyatso: I???m afraid not. I???ve heard stories of their travels, however, and it seems they were both adventurous. Just like you.
Aang looks down, disappointed.
Aang: So there???s no way to tell if they???re still alive???
Gyatso can???t think of a suitable answer for this, so remains quiet. Suddenly, Aang looks up.
Aang: There isn???t anything left to learn in Airbending for me now, is there? I???ve learnt everything.
Gyatso: There is no such thing as learning everything to do with Airbending. You???ll create your own techniques in later life.
Aang: But there???s nothing left for me to do now, right?
Gyatso frowns.
Gyatso: I???m not quite sure where you???re heading with this, Aang.
Aang smiles sheepishly.
Aang: I???m just saying that if I were to leave, just for awhile, I wouldn???t miss anything important???
Gyatso (cautiously): I suppose not.
Aang: And travelling will be good for me. I???d get to learn about life outside the temple.
Gyatso looks at Aang, a slightly confused look on his face.
Gyatso: ???You want to find your parents?
Aang nods solemnly.
Aang: Only if it???s okay by you. I need closure about them, perhaps even get to know them if they???re still alive.
Gyatso nods, although a little reluctantly.
Gyatso: I understand. I???m sure it will be fine with the other monks too. You go pack your belongings and I???ll talk to them.
Aang stands up and bows to Gyatso.
Aang: Thank you.
Gyatso nods again and gestures for Aang to go, smiling. Aang runs off quickly, and the smile disappears from Gyatso???s face, a worried look replacing it. Gyatso sighs and stands up, then begins to walk off, in the direction of the temple.
End of scene.
Hope you liked it although it was kind of short and had a lot of stage directions
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obsessedchic1

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tico1125 wrote:

obsessedchic1 wrote:

I'll write my story about this, but I'll put it tomorrow, I need to meditate and concentrate. j/k

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