Nickelodeon (ended 2008)
| Eyes_Only61646 wrote: |
I've got a couple ideas for the S.P. invasion and/or what happened to Ursa, and also wanted to ask this: Lu Ten. Could we go anywhere with him? |
| BlindBandit wrote: |
| Iroh's son. XPP |
| confucioussayhi wrote: |
Okay, here it is, the Southern Water tribe decimation and Katara and Sokka's mother's death.
Screen pans across bright moonlight sky. The stars are shining and it is snowing. The screen turns down and we see a boy and a man walking on a frozen beach. Boy-Hey, Dad! Look! He bends over and picks a handful of snow up, the snow has a strange black color. Boy-What is it Dad? The man sees the black snow and his eyes widen. Father-Sokka, run, find the other warriors! Sokka-But Dad- Father-Now! The boy runs off to a small village light with numerous fires. Father-(solemnly)No,(pause) please no. He runs up a snow covered hill and sees three sinister metal monsters cruising into the bay. Father-No! Several animal skin-clad warriors run up the hill. Warrior#1-(fearfully)What is it Hakoda? Hakoda-The fire nation is coming. We need to prepare. Scene changes to village. Sokka runs into a tent. Sokka-Mom, look what I found! He shows her the black snow. Mother-(awe)Thats impossible! Hakoda enters and begins rummaging through a sack. Mother-(worried)Hakoda, what is it? What's happening? Hakoda-Kaira, there are fire nation ships in the bay! Get yourself and the kids to safety! Kaira-But what about y- Hakoda-Nevermind me, I'll be fine! A young girl walks into the room and yawns, she was obviously sleeping. Girl-(smiling)Hi, Dad! She runs up and hugs him. Hakoda-Hello, little Katara. We need you and your brother to play hide and seek, okay? Katara-Okay! Where at? Hakoda-(thinks)Pengiun cave! It'll be fun! Katara-Will you come and find me dad? Hakoda-(whispering)If I can. Hakoda rushes out of the room, spear in one hand, sword in the other. Sokka grabs his father's old club and begins to follow him. Kaira-Sokka, where do you think you're going? Sokka-(angrily)To help Dad! Kaira-(sternly)No, you are not! You are going to take your sister to penguin cave! Sokka-But, Mom? Kaira-No buts! (softer)I'll stay and help Dad, okay? Sokka-(pouts)Fine. Katara-What's happening mommy? Kaira-Daddy needs to see about some unwelcome visitors and he wants you to be safe, dear. Katara-Will Dad be alright? Kaira-He'll be fine, little one, now go with your brother. Scene changes to a line of warriors and benders standing on a fortified snow berm. Warrior#1-Hakoda, they're almost here, what we do? Hakoda-Have the waterbenders make a blockade. Oh, and Bato, stay safe. Bato-What, you don't trust me? (jokingly)This isn't like the time we went beark hunting. Hakoda-No, its worse. (smiles)On my signal, friend. Bato-There's the Hakoda I grew up with, wondered when he'd show up.(also smiles) Bato and four waterbenders slide down the slope towards the skiffs and begin to go out into the bay. Hakoda-Wait for it, wait, wait, NOW! As the ships come closer the waterbenders swing their hands in an upward motion, freezing the water into large ice spires, impedeing the ship's movement. On one of the ships a sailor approaches a man in the captains seat. Sailor-Admiral Dou, they've set up large spikes in our path. What are your orders for the helmsman? Admiral Dou-Tell him to increase speed. Sailor-But sir, we'll cr- Admiral Dou-Do as I say or I'll have you trown overboard.(pauses)Well, what are you waiting for, you insolent fool?! Go! The sailor rushes out, cursing uder his breath. The water tribe warriors watch the ships with hope. Bender#1-(worried)They aren't slowing down! Bender#2-Don't worry, they'll turn around, like all the rest. It's just tha- He stops and watches in horror as the ship smashes through the barricade as if it were a handful of toothpicks. Bato-They're icebreakers! Go for the sides, the're's less armor! The benders comply, sending spikes into one of the three ships, disabling it. Soldiers from on deck begin to drop firebombs onto the skiffs. Some of the waterbenders freeze the bombs in midair, but a bomg hit the second skiff, destroying it on impact. Bato-Retreat! Back to the wall! Scene swithes to Sokka and Katara sitting in a cave, waiting for someone to come. Sokka-Ah! I'm tired of waiting! I'm gonna go help Dad! Katara-You can't leave! Sokka-You're always such a stuck-up, wet blanket, tattle tale- Katara-(misheiviously)Unless I'm coming with you! Sokka-You an't come, Mom said to keep you here. Katara-(mockingly)Now who's the wet blanket? Sokka-Ugh! Fine you can come, but no leaving my side, okay? Katara-(smiling)Fine. Scene switches back to the village. Soldiers are everywhere, fighting water tribe warriors. Bender and warrior alike fall to the power of the technology of the fire nation. Bato is on the wall, kicking men off into the water and hacking through soldiers as they approach him. Hakoda spears a man and clubs another in the head. He turns to Bato on the wall and yells. Hakoda-Bato, collapse the wall of the village! Bato-What?! Hakoda-Have the waterbenders crush the ships with the wall! Bato gives the order and the benders reluctantly carry it out. The remaining two ships are imploded under the weight of the falling wall, crushing all of the soldiers inside. Bato-(finally understanding)Now, lets turn it inwards! Scene changes to Katara and Sokka running towards their tent. A scream is heard. Sokka-MOM! Katara and Sokka run inside to see their mother fighting off a soldier with Hakoda's club. She is knocked down and the club falls. Kaira-Sokka, Katara, run away! Their faces mirror the horror they feel as they see the soldier raises his hand. Sokka covers Katara's eyes as she begins to cry. Screen centers on Sokka and Katara as a flash of light illuminates them. The soldier turns with a wicked smile on his face. Soldier-Ha ha ha. Oops, was that yours? Sokka-NO! Sokka charges the sadistic soldier, but before he reaches him a large chunk of ice falls through the roof and smashes him. Sokka and Katara look outside, Katara still crying. They see the wall of the village collapsing upon the soldiers, smashing all of them as the benders manuver the avalance around the warriors. At daylight all of the soldiers are gone, dead or awol. Hakoda finds Sokka and Katara huddled in a snowdrift. Hakoda-(worried)Sokka, Katara, are you alright? Sokka and Katara-Dad! They rush into his arms. Hakoda-Thank the spirits you are both safe! Ah, where is your mother? Sokka and Katara look at their feet, Katara begins to cry again. Hakoda looks like someone had punched him in the gut. Sokka-(tearfully)Mom is, gone. They rush back into Hakoda's arms and begin crying again. Shot pans upward to see sunrise and then pans downward to see sunset and a figure wrapped in cloth being buried in the snow. Hakoda, Sokka, Gran Gran Kanna, and Katara stand beside the grave. Solenmn music is heard as they cover her with snow. Katara is holding onto the necklace that her mother gave her tightly. An old song in an ancient language is sung by Kanna as an arctic dove flies overhead. Shot follows flight of dove into the sky and eventually the sun. |
| electricblue18 wrote: |
| I tried PMing you tico, but it said it was too long, even when I split it into 2 parts... |
| tico1125 wrote: | ||
No biggie. I took the one you had submitted on the forum. |
| Strix_Moonwing wrote: |
| Okay, my favorite scenes to write are funny scenes. So I made one about Kuzon and Aang trying to find a village in the South Pole that has been rumored to have seen his parents. Appa is hurt and is resting in a special hiding place, so the two will have to walk to the village on foot, but some Fire Nation soldiers saw them and are trying to chase after them. (the scene opens with Kuzon and Aang walked through an empty tundra of snow and ice.) Kuzon: (is shivering and grumbling) Aang, I know that you???re trying to find your parents and all, but why here? Why not a nice tropical island that???s warm???.and has food???.and warmth???.and food. (starts drooling, just thinking about it. He???s not paying attention and trips headfirst in snow.) Aang: (laughs) No time to play in the snow, Kuzon. We need to make it to the village before nightfall. Kuzon: (lifts head from snow) Why before nightfall? Aang: (walks past him) So we won???t freeze into icicles. Kuzon: (gets up and brushes snow off his sleeve) Great???being attacked by my own Nation, taking hikes in freezing wastelands, starving to death???..(a flame tipped arrow narrowly misses hit him. He stares at it in horror)???.and almost getting impaled! Boy, Aang, I???m loving this adventure more and more! (screams as more arrows rain down on them.) (Aang sees the arrows come down on his friend. He narrows his eyes, jumps in the air and starts spinning himself around, making a small vortex that knocks the arrows out of the way. He helps Kuzon up and both glance at the direction the arrows came from. They see in the direction, a small sled of Fire benders, being drawn by Saber-wolves. The Fire benders launch another set of flaming arrows at the two boys) Aang: (stares at the sled coming towards them.) Wow, what???s that? Kuzon: (grabs Aang???s arm and starts running) Death on snow! Runnnnn!!!!!!!!!!! (the two narrowly missed getting hit by arrows) (The two start running and screaming as the Fire Nation sled keeps getting closer.) Kuzon: (starts flapping his arms at Aang) Come on Aang! Fly! Aang: I can???t! Kuzon: What do you mean you can???t!? You???re the Avatar! An airbender! Get your gliding thingy and let???s go! Aang: I left my glider with Appa. Kuzon: You whaaaaaaaaaguuhhhhh! (The two don???t look where they???re going and fall down this small hill. They topple to the bottom and are greeting by hundreds of penguins.) Aang: (is surrounded by penguins and is smiling happily) Hello penguins! I???m Aang. (Penguins cheep continually) Kuzon: (is frowning and glaring at penguins) And I???m get out of my way! (starts pushing penguins aside.) Move it or loose it! Shoo! Go away! (gets burrowed under hundreds of penguins. He shoots his head up with flames coming out of his nose.) AAHH! Stupid penguins! They???re going to get us killed! Voice: (from atop hill) Look! There they are! (Aang and Kuzon look at eachother in surprise and then look up. They see the Fire Nation soldiers in the sled on top of the hill, looking at them. Aang and Kuzon look back at eachother and scream, before starting to push penguins out of the way.) Aang: (is trying to get through mob of penguins) Sorry! Excuse! Oops! Kuzon: (continues to push penguins of way) Go! Get! Shove off! MOVE IT! (he trips and lands on the back of a giant sleeping penguin. The penguin jolts awake and starts to wiggle away with Kuzon still on it back. It starts to slide downhill) Kuzon: (is shaking head frantically) No penguin! Nice penguin???no, no, nooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!! (screams as penguin goes sliding down a large hill.) AAAAAANNNNNGGGGGG! Aang: (looks downhill at Kuzon and the penguin and smiles) Hey, that looks fun! Good thinking Kuzon! (spies another sleeping penguin and jumps on top of it.) Yip! Yip! (penguins wakes and starts sliding downhill) Fire nation commander: (stares in surprise before turning to a soldier) Get the saber-wolves moving! The Avatar and the traitor are escaping!) Fire nation solder: (cracks whip at wolves) Mush! (wolves start growling and pull the sled downhill. Penguins rush out of the ways and the sled slides after Aang and Kuzon) (The scene shows Kuzon???s face on top of the penguin, which is twisted in fear and screaming. Aang???s penguin slides right next to his and Aang is smiling and laughing.) Aang: (turns to Kuzon) Isn???t this fun, Kuzon? Kuzon: (glares at Aang and start screaming) IF BY FUN YOU ME, BEING CHASED BY FIRE NATION SOLDIERS AND BEING THROWN DOWN A HILL TO OUR DEATH, THEN YES! WE???RE HAVE TONS, AND TONS OF FUN! Aang: (still smiling and laughing) Me too! Hahahah! (stops laughing as a flaming arrow lands in between the two sliding penguins. Kuzon and Aang glance behind them and scream as they see the Fire nation soldiers starting to send fireballs at them.) Kuzon: (As fire balls crash around him) Aang, they???re gaining on us! Aang: (narrows his eyes and leans down on his penguin) Do as I do! Yip, yip! (The penguins start to twist and turn, dodging the fireballs) Kuzon: Uhh???yip, yip? (winces as penguin grunts and starts dodging) (The scene shows a bird???s eye view of the hill, where Aang, Kuzon, and the fire soldiers are sliding down. We see the Fire Nation flinging balls of flame at Aang and Kuzon, but the two are making their penguin criss-cross with eachother, dodging the flames.) Fire Nation commander: Make these beast go faster! (the whip cracks and the wolves push holder and the sled speeds up until it is now in the middle of Aang and Kuzon. The soldiers on either side of the sled get ready to shoot at Aang and Kuzon.) Kuzon/ Aang: AAAHHHHHH! (both use air/fire bending to propel their penguins in the air, dodging the blast. However, while Aang lands safely ahead of the sled, Kuzon loses grip of his penguin and falls without it. Aang airbends Kuzon so that he lands safely next to Aang and the two share a penguin.) (The sled is gaining speed again until the lead wolf is just barely a foot from Aang and Kuzon???s penguin.) Kuzon: (looks behind him and sees the lead wolf snarling at him. He shrieks as the wolf tries to bite him.) Aang?????? Aang: (he glances behind and sees the wolf. He pushes Kuzon aside.) Hold on! (Aang launched himself in the air, above the lead wolf and unleashes a giant gust of wind that sends the lead wolf flying backwards into the others, entangling them and make the sled topple over, flinging fire soldiers off into the snow) Kuzon: (punches the air with fist as Aang lands himself on the penguin again.) Alright Aang! It???s smooth sailing from here! Aang: (stares over Kuzon???s shoulder) Uh???.I???m not so sure. (he points behind Kuzon and Kuzon turns to see the ridge of this ridge with a deep drop) Kuzon: (gets a WTF look on face) You have got to be kidding me???. (The two start screaming again, as they sail over the ridge???s edge, clinging on to eachother in fear as the stared at the drop below. The two manage to land on the other side, but the penguin loses control and start bouncing up and down in the air as it slides. As it glides upward on this particularly large hill, Aang and Kuzon finally release their grip and they, along with the penguin fall into the snow below.) (A loud crush is heard. The scene shows two large holes in the snow and a penguin looking down inside the holes. Two voices are heard from inside them.) Voice one(Aang): (muffled) Well, that was fun! Wasn???t it Kuzon? Kuzon: (from inside the other hole) Aang, I will never understand an airbender???s definition of fun. (The penguin leaned forward a little bit on Kuzon???s hole and fell in) Ouch! Hehehe, I was laughing while I was writing this. Sorry if it's not what you were looking for, but Tico said to write from the heart and my heart wanted a hilarious penguin chase!XD |
| electricblue18 wrote: | ||||
the story one or the play one? |
| tico1125 wrote: | ||
This was very funny.?? Thanks for the laugh.?? There is just a couple issues with this.?? I am going to keep your first one because it was so well written.?? Not that this one wasn't.?? You certainly did write from your heart on this one too.?? The issue I see with this one is that given the timeline I don't think that Aang knew he was the Avatar just yet.?? See in the story that I wrote up I put it so that he took his trip prior to finding out that he was the Avatar.?? Also the fire nation soldiers may not be in the south pole at this time because they have not attacked the other nations at this point I think they were still in the planning stages of their attacks. So everyone please keep in mind the timeline of events.?? The reason why I did the timeline the way I did was because there is enough evidence that says it could have went this way.?? When Aang learned he was the Avatar it seemed that within a couple days he ran away and got caught in the storm.?? Therefore I surmise that he searched for his family before he learned about him being the avatar.?? While he was on his journey he learned everything his parents did in their travels and eventually found out that they died.?? ( I will leave their death up the the official writers.) |
| Strix_Moonwing wrote: | ||||
I'm glad you liked it.^-^ Sorry about the timeline thing. I didn't know when everything was going to happen, but you did say that Kuzon and Aang were going penguin sledding, so I just wanted to write something about that. I'll fix it once you get the timeline straight. |
| tico1125 wrote: | ||||||
I took the newest one. I did not read it though because I figured that if you made any changes that it would be the ones that you and I discussed. Or should I reread it? |
| Strix_Moonwing wrote: | ||||
I'm glad you liked it.^-^ Sorry about the timeline thing. I didn't know when everything was going to happen, but you did say that Kuzon and Aang were going penguin sledding, so I just wanted to write something about that. I'll fix it once you get the timeline straight. |
| BlindBandit wrote: |
| *question* When's the poll thread goin' up? |
| electricblue18 wrote: | ||||||||
I think I changed a little more than what we discussed, but it isn't really major. It has more details though! ^_^ |
| Taang_Forever wrote: |
| I thought it was great, too, especially the last part. I would also like to add that the four toys that Aang choose were a turtle, a string propelled device, a hog-monkey, and a drum. Just thought you'd like to know. I just thought about this now. Toph's name in hindu I think, means "drum". I'd say Sokka could be the monkey and Aang the string-propelled devide. Leaving the turtle to be Katara, the waterbender... Anyone think turtles are the animals associated with water tribe avatars? |
| Taang_Forever wrote: |
| I thought it was great, too, especially the last part. I would also like to add that the four toys that Aang choose were a turtle, a string propelled device, a hog-monkey, and a drum. Just thought you'd like to know. I just thought about this now. Toph's name in hindu I think, means "drum". I'd say Sokka could be the monkey and Aang the string-propelled devide. Leaving the turtle to be Katara, the waterbender... Anyone think turtles are the animals associated with water tribe avatars? |
