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My Fanfic-Dark aftermath Chapter 12 is up! 13+ Recommended

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    the_mental_teen

    [41]Dec 18, 2006
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    confucioussayhi wrote:

    Disclaimer-I don't own Avatar, yeah go ahead and rub it in.

    Pain. So heavy and full of pain that she could feel it. She could tell that Number 11 was in pain. Not physical pain, but emotional pain. She was no longer afraid of him, far from it,??she felt old urges that told her to help him. She didn't know why or how but she would. Her promise would be easier to??complete as the door to maximum slammed open and??a guard, dragging 11 behind him came in. The guard stopped at the girl's cell he unlocked the door and threw the freak in. It immediately stood up and rammed into the bars snarling and growling at the man. "Ha!" He said, "See how you like it in there!". The Animal-man's response was to slash at the bars with his hand. "Freak." came the guards snide remark as he walked away laughing.

    "So, whats up?" the girl asked. He growled. "You have a name?" she expected another growl or a roughly put together response, but what she heard was "My name was taken from me long ago." He said solemnly. She was genuinely surprised. "So, you're not always freaked out?" she asked. "No." came his simple response. "How'd you get in here?" "Why do you ask so many questions?" he replied. "I'm curious about the Animal-man. This psychotic, yet simultaneously??in complete control mystery." she said. "It's a long story." he said simply. "Lucky us. We've got nothing but time." she said with a smile.

    "No." he said firmly. "Ok," she said "one last question then.". "Fine." he said. "Who was that man in the stands?" His eyes widened. "Nobody." he said shakily. "There's the nerve." she thought. "He sounded like he knew you." "He must have been mistaken.". "You can't always hide. Sometimes it helps to let go." she said. His face softened at the caring in her voice. "Why do you care?" he said, less fierce this time. "I used to help people all the time. It hasn't been washed away by this place."she said. "Well," he said as a smile slowly creeped across his face "since we've got nothing but time."

    Yeah less action but big plot change! He's not always a man-killing freak! He has a??(somewhat)??nice side which you'll hear about in my next chapter.

    /\I've run out of clever things to say so here it is. OH! From the makers of Tex-lax! YEEEAAAAHAW!



    good chappy, and nice Toph sigs!
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    confucioussayhi

    [42]Dec 18, 2006
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    Thanks, i'm glad someone reads my fanfic.
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    the_mental_teen

    [43]Dec 18, 2006
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Thanks, i'm glad someone reads my fanfic.


    I read tons of fanfic at nick.com, so I'm experienced at replying and concentrating on the story.

    BTW, I helped Peter on "Family Guy" get obbsessed in his fantasy world, lol.
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    confucioussayhi

    [44]Dec 18, 2006
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    Yeeeeaaaah, i'll prentend I know what you mean and just smile.
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    the_mental_teen

    [45]Dec 18, 2006
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Yeeeeaaaah, i'll prentend I know what you mean and just smile.


    It was an episode, I guess you didn't see it...
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    confucioussayhi

    [46]Dec 18, 2006
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    the_mental_teen wrote:
    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Yeeeeaaaah, i'll prentend I know what you mean and just smile.
    It was an episode, I guess you didn't see it...
    Nope I was probably reading(i'm addicted )
    Edited on 12/18/2006 11:17am
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    the_mental_teen

    [47]Dec 18, 2006
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    the_mental_teen wrote:
    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Yeeeeaaaah, i'll prentend I know what you mean and just smile.
    It was an episode, I guess you didn't see it...
    Nope I was probably reading(i'm addicted )


    lmao!
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    confucioussayhi

    [48]Dec 18, 2006
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    Now, to pass time...my inspirations! The movie Unleashed, the movie Spartucus, the movie Gladiator, LES a.k.a. LightEcoSage on fanfiction.net, love ya!, Jak 2, and my complete and uttermost favorite author of all time...CLIVE CUSSLER!
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    the_mental_teen

    [49]Dec 18, 2006
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Now, to pass time...my inspirations! The movie Unleashed, the movie Spartucus, the movie Gladiator, LES a.k.a. LightEcoSage on fanfiction.net, love ya!, Jak 2, and my complete and uttermost favorite author of all time...CLIVE CUSSLER!


    ...ok...
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    go_ugly_people

    [50]Dec 18, 2006
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    chapter 6?
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    confucioussayhi

    [51]Dec 18, 2006
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    go_ugly_people wrote:
    chapter 6?
    Jeezus gimme a sec.
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    go_ugly_people

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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    go_ugly_people wrote:
    chapter 6?
    Jeezus gimme a sec.


    ok fine
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    go_ugly_people

    [53]Dec 18, 2006
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    chapter 6 is up


    now go read it
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    confucioussayhi

    [54]Dec 18, 2006
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    Disclaimer-I do not own Avatar but I will soon! Mwuhuhuhahahah, can anyone say, hostile takeover?

    "Where do I start?" he asked. "What's your name, really?" she asked in return. He looked at his feet as if he were concentrating hard on the answer. "Dak." he said. "My name was Dak." "Dak huh?" she replied. "Odd name." He continued "I was in a group of rebels. We were fighting against the fire lord. We were sent by Jeong Jeong to meet up with the main force at the gates of the city.". "Jeong Jeong?" she asked. "Oh, he was the leader of?? the rebel movement and a friend of the Avatar. Anyways," he said tiredly. "We were ambushed. A member of our group sold us out for the promise of protection." What happened to him?" "He was murdered in his sleep by a palace guard. He should've stayed and fought. He would have died with honor, not be shamefully??killed in his sleep."

    "So how'd you get here?" she asked. "I was captured. I should've died but I wouldn't go down. They thought it would be fun to keep me as a gladiator." he replied. "Thats horrible." she said. "What was worse, I had to watch them bring back my dead companion's bodies back from the ring." he stopped for a second, then continued. "One day I couldn't take it anymore, I killed the guard who laughed at my dead friends, he mocked them and I couldn't stand it. I had killed before but because I had to. I killed him because I could. The other times in the ring I had a spear or a broadsword to fight with??but I slashed his throat with my bare hands. Even after he was dead, I was still stabbing him. That was my first encounter with Death's funhouse. Thats what made it happen."

    "Made what happen?". "After that day there was a voice, deep in my head that whispered to me. It told me to kill. Slowly after seeing 5 years of death and pain I began to listen. I was already a savage fighter, but once the voice took over the only thing that could stop me was the voice itself, or a satchel full of shirshu darts." he??said. "What happened then?" she asked. "Well I can't remember, most of its a blur. One kill after another, all of it seems the same after awhile." he finished. "So here I am, the freak who's killed a thousand men." he chuckled, or tried to. "Well, how about you?". "I was a traveling companion of the Avatar. In fact, I taught him earthbending." she smiled. "My name's Toph,"she said, leaning out into the light, showing her eyes for the first time,??"and I think we're gonna be good friends."

    Well duh, anyone with a brain cell could figure it out. So now that??Toph's on the scene things get exciting!

    /\Okay I'm officially out of clever things to say. Eat it up you rabid readers you. Ha! I still got it!

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    PhoenixAngel37

    [55]Dec 18, 2006
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    i think i already commented on this but one more comment would not hurt.......great way to introduce Toph and interesting Plot twist...keep up the great job on writing fanfics..
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    confucioussayhi

    [56]Dec 18, 2006
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    PhoenixAngel37 wrote:
    i think i already commented on this but one more comment would not hurt.......great way to introduce Toph and interesting Plot twist...keep up the great job on writing fanfics..
    Yes you did. And thanks two more tomorrow I'm all thunk out.
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    mblizzow

    [57]Dec 18, 2006
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    ok so i read all three pages before i decided to comment.is that ok??? i really like it, action and gore are some great stuff. personally i think u should write a fanfic novel. such a good writer for someone soo young.
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    confucioussayhi

    [58]Dec 18, 2006
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    Thanks. I would need a publisher for that and no one would let me do it without a copyright.
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    mblizzow

    [59]Dec 18, 2006
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    Thanks. I would need a publisher for that and no one would let me do it without a copyright.


    well ur on ur way. keep up the good work. seriously. now. what am i to do now that i have nothing to read. this is all ur fault.
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    confucioussayhi

    [60]Dec 18, 2006
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    I sucks right? I won't be able to post new chapters until wednesday. I'm sorry please don't eat me!
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