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My fanfic-Dark Aftermath

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    confucioussayhi

    [1]Dec 21, 2006
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    Well since the other one was deleted I have to start this one. Give me a sec and I will re-post chapter 1.
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    confucioussayhi

    [2]Dec 21, 2006
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    Disclaimer-I do not own Avatar in any way shape or form but I own the ring.

    Life has a funny way of screwing over it's saviors. Just when it looks like the heroes will come out on top, the ground falls from under their feet and they decsend into hell. For the Avatar Aang, this is how it happened. The failed attempt to take the Fire Nation capital cost them all. Aang was now a spectacle for all patrons to see. Appa was in the cirus, Momo was a??Higher-up's exotic??pet. History doesn't yet show the lives of Katara, Sokka, and Toph. Katara and Sokka were rumored to have escaped at the last minute. Toph's whereabouts were unknown.

    8 Years after the war-

    "Damn." the girl thought "He's tougher than Skan said he was. Ahh!" She dodged a particularly nasty looking, blood-stained flail. She jumped on the man's back slashing his hand with the puny dagger that she was allowed. The brute dropped his weapon, and picked her up. She was being held by the throat, when she bit the man's hand. For the second time he howled and dropped his victim. His eyes caught sight of his flail and he went for it.

    As he was awaiting the verdict, the crowd cheered the girl's death. "What kind of people do this?" She asked herself mentally. The man with a flaming crown of gold in the center throne turned his thumb down. The giant smiled, his flail would taste blood today. "NO!" The girl cried out. "I will not die here!" The giant recoiled in suprise. The girl knew she wasn't supposed to show her power yet but she didn't care. Maximum was better than this. She put her hand to the ground forcefully, then retracted it with a gripping motion. The brute didn't have time to react to the razor sharp earth spires that went through his chest.

    I know it is very short but its easier for me that way. If it sounds too violent please tell me and I will tone it down.

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    the_mental_teen

    [3]Dec 21, 2006
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    Can you, by any way, say what happened that messed up everything? I'm really curious what happened according to your fanfic. I'm guessing a little later will explain a little, but I'm just curious.

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    confucioussayhi

    [4]Dec 21, 2006
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    You'll find out later.
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    confucioussayhi

    [5]Dec 21, 2006
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    Chapter-2

    Disclaimer-I don't own blah blah blah and yada yada yada.

    "What the hell was that?!?!"A man yelled at the girl. "I was gonna die!" She yelled back before she remembered her place in society. "WHAT!" The man screamed. "WHAT DID YOU SAY!" "I'm sorry!" She said. "I didn't mean it!". "Your mouth and and your actions in the ring leave me no choice-". "HA!" She thought, there was nothing more that he wanted to do than to put her in a little cramped cell. "-but to throw you in maximum!". "Bingo." She thought as she was roughly forced into the maximum security cell.

    Later that night-

    The girl couldn't sleep. "Why?" she thought. "Why am I here? Why me?" but she always asked these questions. A different thing was bothering her this time. Inhuman screams were coming from the door that led to, as the inmates called it, Death's funhouse. She had heard those very??screams before, mostly from that door. One reason why she hated maximum. But no, he made those sounds all the time. He was called animal-man by the gaurds, because of his tendencies to yell and growl more than he talked. So of the other inmates would whisper about the credibility of him being human. But everyone knew he had a rough life and that he must've snapped a long time ago.

    Just then a creaking sound came from Death's funhouse, then a metallic ripping and shredding noise. The she heard the sound that was one of the few things that scared her. His roar. A deep terrible roar, like a lion, but much worse. Another more awful sound came next. The shredding sound of a blade and the guard's death scream. Everyone covered their ears except the girl. She blindly??watched as a small red dot appeared on the solid metal door. The dot grew brighter and larger until a hand pushed through the door. A white hot knife, literally. She could feel it's power from where she was. His hand was covered in white flames concentrated so intense that it could cut through steel. Which it began to.

    Halfway through cutting the door open, two guards came rushing into the hallway. While one prepared the shirshu spit darts, the other got out the keys. The thing inside apparently heard the guards and had backed up into the room so that when the door opened he would have a sraight shot, but thats wasn't the case. As soon as the first guard unlocked the door he was slammed into the wall from the force of the thing that burst through the doorway. The animal-man, rightly named, jumped on the second guard, grabbing a plate from the back of his armor and stabbed him in the throat with his burning??white hand. After he landed on top of the dead man he turned on the first guard and began to charge. He never reached his goal though. As four darts appeared in his chest, the only thing everyone knew he could be thinking about was clear. Revenge, and lots of it. He would be hell in the ring tomorrow and everyone prayed they wouldn't have to fight him.

    How about that? Huh? Like I said he kills a bunch of people, so if that disturbs you, let me know and I will tone it down. Ok? R and R please.

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    mblizzow

    [6]Dec 21, 2006
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    what does u'll find out later mean???



    bribing u with tophness.
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    kingdom707

    [7]Dec 21, 2006
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    your other one wasn't deleted. it is still there and you can put your chapters on that or you can stay on this one. either way i am going to read your fanfic
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    confucioussayhi

    [8]Dec 21, 2006
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    mblizzow wrote:
    what does u'll find out later mean???



    bribing u with tophness.
    You've already read it. But, you are bribing me with Tophness, wait! I have that already! Nah.
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    mblizzow

    [9]Dec 21, 2006
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    aaaaawwwww u put my thing in ur sig. i feel sooo special.
    why was the other thread deleted???
    yea i know i already read it. so????
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    confucioussayhi

    [11]Dec 21, 2006
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    kingdom707 wrote:
    your other one wasn't deleted. it is still there and you can put your chapters on that or you can stay on this one. either way i am going to read your fanfic
    I couldn't find it. If you can go ahead and bring it back please. I didn't see it... maybe I'm blind... hmm
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    confucioussayhi

    [12]Dec 21, 2006
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    mblizzow wrote:
    aaaaawwwww u put my thing in ur sig. i feel sooo special.
    why was the other thread deleted???
    yea i know i already read it. so????
    Kingdom says it wasn't, but I didn't see it.
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    mblizzow

    [13]Dec 21, 2006
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    confucioussayhi wrote:
    kingdom707 wrote:
    your other one wasn't deleted. it is still there and you can put your chapters on that or you can stay on this one. either way i am going to read your fanfic
    I couldn't find it. If you can go ahead and bring it back please. I didn't see it... maybe I'm blind... hmm


    nothin like the blind bandit, hahahahahahaha
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    confucioussayhi

    [14]Dec 21, 2006
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    mblizzow wrote:
    confucioussayhi wrote:
    kingdom707 wrote:
    your other one wasn't deleted. it is still there and you can put your chapters on that or you can stay on this one. either way i am going to read your fanfic
    I couldn't find it. If you can go ahead and bring it back please. I didn't see it... maybe I'm blind... hmm


    nothin like the blind bandit, hahahahahahaha
    Ok mblizzow let this one die. Kingdom found my other one.
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