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Fanfiction:Fall of the Southern Air Temple Part One

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    TheRougeMonk16

    [1]Dec 29, 2006
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    A Fire Nation General sits in a tent at the base of a mountain. He looks up from his desk as a young Fire Nation officer runs into his tent. The officer looks the General in the eyes and bows. The General nods his heads, signaling the officer to go ahead and speak.

    Officer: General Zhao, are enginnears now estimate that we should be able to blow through to the temple by sun down.

    Gen. Zhao: Good, that will give me time to move my troops into the tunnels and surprise those Nomads with a night attack. By the way, how is the progress on Mount Sergai, Captain Jeong Jeong.

    Capt. Jeong Jeong: I just came down from there, and??are enginnears??report that they have built artillary and have concealed??well. I would also like to report that are Ignasti have gotten across to the Southern Air Temple and are building a makeshift bridge in order for men to cross.

    Zhao: And they are yet to be detected? I am depending on them not to be caught, if they are this operation??will no longer be able to be concealed. I am already surprised as it is that the Nomads??do not realize that those rumbles??in there mountain are man made. Hell,??have you ever experience an "earthquake" every hour? These Nomads are so ignorant of the Fire Nation??Army's abilities.

    Zhao pauses. He thinks of how many things could go wrong with this operation. So many intricate??details that could go awry??and cause the operation??to be found out by the??Air Nomads.??He knew that this Operation may??be the Fire Nation's only chance to capture, no, to kill the... "Sir"...Zhao breaks??out of deep thought.

    Jeong Jeong: Sir, are you ok?

    Zhao turns to Jeong??Jeong.

    Zhao: Yes, I am fine. Jeong Jeong, prepare the men to enter the tunnels and get them in position near the emergence holes.??Tell the seige artillary to be ready??at the signal.??And tell the enginnears to blow the emergence holes at nightfall. We will attack then.

    Jeong??Jeong: (bows) Yes sir. (And leaves the tent)

    General Zhao sits back down and rest his head in his??hands. Zhao thinks to himself, "??There is still along time for this to??mess up.??And this is the only chance for me to get the Avatar."????

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    TheRougeMonk16

    [2]Dec 29, 2006
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    Just for a filler:

    This fanfic actually takes place five to ten years after Aang runs away from the Southern Air Temple

    General Zhao is actually General Zhao's father from season 1

    Jeong Jeong is actually Jeong Jeong from the Deserter

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    GeneralSmith

    [3]Dec 29, 2006
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    wow this is and awesome fanfic. I cant wait for part two
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    Trollwrangler

    [4]Dec 29, 2006
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    You're not explaining everything well enough. Jeong Jeong is totally OC and why he is working for the Fire Nation again is to come later I guess. A LOT doesn't make sense in accordance to times and other things. You should also have more explanation to accompany the dialogue.
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    TheRougeMonk16

    [5]Dec 29, 2006
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    Trollwrangler wrote:
    You're not explaining everything well enough. Jeong Jeong is totally OC and why he is working for the Fire Nation again is to come later I guess. A LOT doesn't make sense in accordance to times and other things. You should also have more explanation to accompany the dialogue.

    Read my second post it explains alot. Besides it is when Jeong Jeong is a very young officer in the FN army and General Zhao is actually Zhao's father

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    Trollwrangler

    [6]Dec 29, 2006
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    I apologize for my remarks, but I'm still not gonna read it. I'm??not interested at all.??
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    Bandage2

    [7]Dec 29, 2006
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    I thought the airbenders were wiped out 100 years ago... that would be before jj and father zhao were even old enuf to fight (jj is NOT 120)
    Edited on 12/29/2006 8:44pm
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