Hey all,



I just wanted to hear your thoughts. Before the Avatar show even
started I was writing the book. It is similar to the show in the
respect of the forces of nature but that is it. It is about a boy that
overcomes some mental challenges to eventually find out that he is the
heir to a medallion of great power. When he puts the medallion on he
becomes the Guardian of the natural balance. He gains total control
over the four forces of nature and gains the ability to transform his
body into any of the various forms of the four elements. He is able to
travel at the speed of light when he changes his body into the light
form (which is another form of fire). His entire life is turned upside
down and he is pressed to protect humanity while correcting the
mistakes of his ancestor. The book is called, "The True Guardian" and
I have placed the prologue below. Tell me what you think plz.



Thanks!



Above the Bermuda Triangle Leo stopped in midair. He surveyed the area as the sun was slowly descending into the west. His eyes flashed blue as used the power of water. His arms were spread apart as the ocean opened to compensate for the shear size of the island. As the ocean parted he then reached the floor. Through his mind he displaced all of the water evenly so as to not affect the surrounding land masses.



Leo then thought to himself, ???What is my true purpose? I am now trying to correct the past actions of my ancestor. When I complete this task am I to go into
hiding so the world does not hunt me? I am the Guardian now and I do not know everything that I need to know about myself, the world, and what place I have in it now that I have changed.???



Leo reflected upon the memories of the spirits to gain a better understanding as to where his new life is going.

It's pretty confusing, but it seems to definetely have some potential. It's relieving to see the few grammatical errors. The prologue is just a bit awkward to read, however, mainly because it asks the reader so many questions the reader stops being able to focus on any of them and stops caring altogether. If you layered the prologue more gradually it would be much for effective in my opinion. Naturally, however, the final decision is completely up to you.

I never understand prolouges the first time I read them, but this is pretty clear. But that is probably because you posted what it is about. It looks ok for a beginning. Keep at it!

it is a little confusing.. but it catches ur attention!

29

Not that old but I just enjoy writing.

Oh... I'm just 14, so I guess you know what you're doing.

I would most likely read it. THIS IS MY ONE HUNDRETH POST, YEA YEA YEA

Gratz!!!!

Can anyone tell me how you get different levels?

Sounds like an interesint concept for a tv. series. Not sure about a book though. What age group is it for?

I'd buy it. It seems interesting. :3 Good job. *thumbs up of approval*

If anyone is interested...

I have just created a blog on my profile.?? Feel free to post there.?? I will try to answer any questions without revealing too much.

sounds good for an old geezer.. just kidding! sounds really intriguing