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    r3173mpt10n

    [7501]Jun 20, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:

    Ok, this is my criticizing post. I read TLG's, The Second Sign's, and Redemption's posts.

    I thought TLG's post was good. I like how he made the conflict within Willy, because he has difficulty choosing sides...I don't know, it was just good following his last post.

    The Second Sign's post was impressive. I'm starting to get used to the idea of his story. Meeting his insane brother was better when I read it, because there was room for compromise even though it seemed like there would be regret instead. The arguements and conversations, along with detail were also entertaining.

    Redemption's post was confusing. I'm not going to lie, but what is the "Dark Aura" or "black Aura" thing you've got there? I can sense the drama, but I'm not comprehending "giving into the darkness". Sounds a bit like kingdom hearts...

    Let me rephrase that for a second.
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    r3173mpt10n

    [7502]Jun 20, 2008
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    It's more like Zuko's hatred to fuel his firebending. Genesis uses hatred or his dark side to fuel his dark aura thing.
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    ThatLostGuy

    [7503]Jun 20, 2008
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    Thanks for the comment, Dafoose. Yeah, I just having been feeling "it" like I used to. My Asiscio post I made a little earlier this week I REALLY LIKED a lot, and I felt proud of myself. Then my Silo post, I was reallly tired and out of it, and I didn't like that one so much. And the new Willy post was good I guess, just not as good as the Asiscio one.

    I'm hoping to make a REALLY COOL post soon. We'll see what happens...
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    r3173mpt10n

    [7504]Jun 20, 2008
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    Sorry for that confusion Dafoose. I didn't really specify it, but I did now or I'll justsay it in this post.

    Firebender + Hatred = Genesis + Hatred

    Firebender + Hatred = Firebending

    Genesis + Hatred = Aura Thingy

    Firebending = Aura Thingy

    I think I got my math right. That's kind of what I meant....

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    Lord-darkboy

    [7505]Jun 20, 2008
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    r3173mpt10n wrote:

    Sorry for that confusion Dafoose. I didn't really specify it, but I did now or I'll justsay it in this post.

    Firebender + Hatred = Genesis + Hatred

    Firebender + Hatred = Firebending

    Genesis + Hatred = Aura Thingy

    Firebending = Aura Thingy

    I think I got my math right. That's kind of what I meant....

    hmm

    so Genesis + Hatred + Firebending = 2Aura Thingies

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    h3r01cdud3

    [7506]Jun 20, 2008
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    Skar Kasai:Firebender and outcast general

    ----------------------------------------------------

    Skar wakes up in bed in Ba Seng Se national Hotel.

    Skar: Hey! Urojang, you up yet?!

    Urojang: Yea, but what about Chromos? Is he up yet?

    Chromos: Ahhhhhh! Shut up! I'm trying to sleep here!

    Skar: I take that as a yes.

    Skar: C'mon lets get our mission.

    Chromos: Wait....Urojang is up right?

    Chromos runs up to Urojang's room. He peeks throught the door and...

    Urojang: Ahhhh! No get out,get out!

    Chromos: Ahhh! Oh sweet mother and all that is holy,I knew I should had stopped smoking.

    Skar: Pervert!

    Chromos: All right! Now I'm ready!

    They go to the door and find a scroll in front.

    Skar: It says there is a recent amount of killings but there are no traces of who killed them.

    Urojang: Sounds like a ghost. Skar do you think Ba Seng Se is haunted!

    Skar: Please, grow up. Whoever sent this note wants us to exterminate whatever killed those men.But the killings were in old Ba Seng Se.

    Urojang: I don't have a good feelling about this.

    Skar and the Blazers went to Old Ba Seng Se to investigate the corpses.

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    Mei-Chi

    [7507]Jun 20, 2008
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    aura thingy?Do u mean aura color or aura type?
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    Dafoose

    [7508]Jun 20, 2008
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    Lord-darkboy wrote:
    r3173mpt10n wrote:

    Sorry for that confusion Dafoose. I didn't really specify it, but I did now or I'll justsay it in this post.

    Firebender + Hatred = Genesis + Hatred

    Firebender + Hatred = Firebending

    Genesis + Hatred = Aura Thingy

    Firebending = Aura Thingy

    I think I got my math right. That's kind of what I meant....

    hmm

    so Genesis + Hatred + Firebending = 2Aura Thingies

    Well, I think we forgot this.

    Genesis + Hatred + Firebending - old Aura thingy + Firebending= 1 new black Aura. Very stylish.

    Sorry, just joking around. I understand.

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    r3173mpt10n

    [7509]Jun 20, 2008
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    Lord-darkboy wrote:
    r3173mpt10n wrote:

    Sorry for that confusion Dafoose. I didn't really specify it, but I did now or I'll justsay it in this post.

    Firebender + Hatred = Genesis + Hatred

    Firebender + Hatred = Firebending

    Genesis + Hatred = Aura Thingy

    Firebending = Aura Thingy

    I think I got my math right. That's kind of what I meant....

    hmm

    so Genesis + Hatred + Firebending = 2Aura Thingies


    ...I guess...But he doesn't Firebend.
    Let me try this again...I'm math illiterate...
    Genesis + Hatred = Aura
    which is kind of like...
    Zuko + Hatred = Firebend
    So like they both use hatred as that one variable that equals whatever they're trying to do...
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    r3173mpt10n

    [7510]Jun 20, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:
    Lord-darkboy wrote:
    r3173mpt10n wrote:

    Sorry for that confusion Dafoose. I didn't really specify it, but I did now or I'll justsay it in this post.

    Firebender + Hatred = Genesis + Hatred

    Firebender + Hatred = Firebending

    Genesis + Hatred = Aura Thingy

    Firebending = Aura Thingy

    I think I got my math right. That's kind of what I meant....

    hmm

    so Genesis + Hatred + Firebending = 2Aura Thingies

    Well, I think we forgot this.

    Genesis + Hatred + Firebending - old Aura thingy + Firebending= 1 new black Aura. Very stylish.

    Sorry, just joking around. I understand.


    It's cool. As long as you get it.
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    r3173mpt10n

    [7511]Jun 20, 2008
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    Mei-Chi wrote:
    aura thingy?Do u mean aura color or aura type?
    Aura in general...I guess...
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    r3173mpt10n

    [7512]Jun 20, 2008
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    h3r01cdud3 wrote:

    Skar Kasai:Firebender and outcast general

    ----------------------------------------------------

    Skar wakes up in bed in Ba Seng Se national Hotel.

    Skar: Hey! Urojang, you up yet?!

    Urojang: Yea, but what about Chromos? Is he up yet?

    Chromos: Ahhhhhh! Shut up! I'm trying to sleep here!

    Skar: I take that as a yes.

    Skar: C'mon lets get our mission.

    Chromos: Wait....Urojang is up right?

    Chromos runs up to Urojang's room. He peeks throught the door and...

    Urojang: Ahhhh! No get out,get out!

    Chromos: Ahhh! Oh sweet mother and all that is holy,I knew I should had stopped smoking.

    Skar: Pervert!

    Chromos: All right! Now I'm ready!

    They go to the door and find a scroll in front.

    Skar: It says there is a recent amount of killings but there are no traces of who killed them.

    Urojang: Sounds like a ghost. Skar do you think Ba Seng Se is haunted!

    Skar: Please, grow up. Whoever sent this note wants us to exterminate whatever killed those men.But the killings were in old Ba Seng Se.

    Urojang: I don't have a good feelling about this.

    Skar and the Blazers went to Old Ba Seng Se to investigate the corpses.


    What's with all the faces? and who are these two other people?
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    -TheSecondSign-

    [7513]Jun 20, 2008
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    Dosu Kinuta, mercanary, Fire Nation prison ship

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    As their swords met, sparks flew through the air. Dosu swung harder and faster than he ever had before, his strikes were precise and meant soley to kill. There was no room for error. Not when fighting Itami. Itami carelessly dodged each one while picking at his teeth with one sword. He had a dull, unexcited look on his face.

    "You insane bastard!" Dosu growled and he ran forth and swung both swords at Itami's sides.

    The attack caught Itami off guard and he recoiled back, but quickly regained his footing.

    "Well, well. It looks like you do indeed live up to your new reputation, Dossy. Remember when I used to call you that? Dossy? Mom hated it. Said I should stop," he joked, and he blocked all of Dosu's attacks. Their swords met with such speed and force that they were hardly visible, only streaks of massive light showed their path, and they passed by almost instantly. Dosu drew back. He was sweating. Itami was just standing there. He began to pick at his teeth with his scimitar.

    "Funny. How when dad passed out his swords he gave me one and you one, and how we both forged our own for a dual pair. I always said mine looked cooler, but now that I look at them from the receiving end, I can see the intimidating effect. The bright, silvery color really makes them look intimidating. The light makes them appear larger than they are. Good scare factorm" he spoke, with calm demeanor.

    "Grr....shut up," Dosu said, and he changed his footing. He drew out his swords and began to prepare for the next attack. Suddenly he heard guards at the door. Itami threw his offhand scimitar at the door and it slammed it shut, sealing them in.

    "I wanted some privacy," he said, "Besides, it's pretty clear I outmatch you, Dossy. I only need one sword."

    "Well if you're so skilled why don't you come and take me then?" Dosu asked.

    "Oh, OK," he said, and he threw his sword out to the ground and it sank into the metal. He then charged at Dosu with his sword still grinding through the metal, but he wasn't slowed in the slightest from this. He nearly jumped across the room and Dosu had to use all his strength to stop the blow. His swords met Itami's in an X pattern, and Dosu retaliated with a ferocious strike that swept across the room, and sliced some of the prison bars around them open.

    "You bastard..." he breathed, "You killed us that day...."

    "Oh yeah, yeah. I killed you. It wasn't the hundreds of soldiers coming at you-"

    "You could've warned us! Instead of turning on us and murdering your own tribesmen!"

    "Oh yeah. That. Well, what can I say. I wanted to have some fun. And now I'm having fun."

    "What do you mean?"

    "Well, you're the last of them, Dosu, didn't you know that. Of our brothers and sisters you and I are the last to survive." He smiled and raised up his right hand. On it were several trinkets that were immediately recognizable. His face contorted into one of rage and shock.

    "You sick freak! You murdered your own blood? Your own family?!"

    "Yup, all of them. Not one survived. I even got mom," he said, and he lifted up his arm further and revealed a hairpiece that their mother always adored.

    "And my most recent success," he said, and held his arm up further and revealed a small model dagger.

    "You.....you murdered your younger brother?! HE WAS ONLY 10!" Dosu screamed, and he ran at Itami and brought down his swords. Itami raised his own and blocked, and then in the same instant, retaliated and thrust. Dosu made a deep utteral grunt and slowly looked down.

    The sword stuck deep into his chest, all the way through. He could feel it going out the other end of his chest. He looked down and then back up at Itami and his vision began to blur.

    "I told you, brother. You're the last of them. The last of our family. I killed mom. I killed dad. I killed all your brothers and sisters. You disowned me a long time ago, Dossy. Or should I say Dosu? Not that it matters anymore," he said, and then he pulled out the sword, and Dosu fell to his knees.

    "Now, about that keepsake," he said, and he grabbed Dosu's scimitar, the one his father had given him.

    "You can keep the one you forged to match it," he said, and held up both of the twin swords of their father.

    "It's like I said Dossy, I killed everyone. Everyone but you. And now I've killed you," he said, just as Dosu began to lose it. He hit the ground hard and didn't move. As the scimitar that held the door in place was thrown aside. Itami was about to deliver the final blow.

    "Enough," said a Fire Nation soldier, "We need him."

    "BUT YOU SAID I COULD KILL ANYONE I WANTED. AND I WANT HIM!" Itami screamed, but his request was denied.

    "You can kill him when we're done getting information. Until then," he said, and then he motioned at another guard, "do what you can with his wounds."

    And then everything went black.

    When he awoke, he was stripped of his things. He felt pain and thought he would die, but he felt a strange sensation go over his wounds. He wondered if this was what death felt like.

    Edited on 06/20/2008 7:23pm
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    Dafoose

    [7514]Jun 20, 2008
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    I think that's another good one, second sign.
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    djdfire

    [7515]Jun 20, 2008
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    Because I'm bored an idea popped up in my head and no one from my group is posting, I'm making another fight post.

    Ariel (waterbender), Chase (firebender)

    -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

    Ariel looked at Dak, waiting on the sarcastic comment that was sure to follow but all that came "Eh, good job". She looked at him, a little puzzled, but she shrugged her shoulders and returned the comment to him. Dak, Sayo (who had retrieved his weapon), and Ariel soon entered the fight once again, and Ariel soon found her self fighting multiple people at once, again.

    One guy turned out to be a firebender and shot huge and multiple fireballs at her. She dodged them with ease and slashed the man in the face with a blade of water. He fell down as the next guy rushed towards her with a huge hammer in his hand. He hit the ground and large chunks of earth rose up. He then hit the chunks with his hammer and and flew towards Ariel. 'This is to easy' Ariel smirked as she she dodged one of the chunks. The man kept hitting more chunks at her, getting frustrated that none of them were connecting with their target. He then bended a huge boulder out of the ground and hurled it at her, this time it was she couldn't dodge it. Ariel positioned herself and drew water from her pouch, and as soon as the boulder came clome enough, she slashed a long, sharp whip of water and managed to split the boulder in half. The earthbender looked at her and the broken halves of the boulder and was astonished. He took a step back and fell oevr some random dead body. Ariel advanced up on him, goin in for the kill, when all of a sudden she was jerked back by an invisble force, drawing her away from the main fray.

    She flew onto the ground and was drug until her back hit a tree. She looked back to see what was pulling her and saw her water pouch was in the air and pointing foward in front of her. She looked and saw a man standing there, a wicked smile on his face.

    "Well, well, well what do we have here. Another rogue waterbender?", he stated, pointing at her water pouch.

    "Who are you, and how are you controlling my pouch?", she asked, clenching her fist. The man snickered and looked at her.

    "Think about it", he answered. Ariel glared at him until the real answer popped up in her head. 'Of course!', She thought a she looked at her pouch.

    "You're a waterbender aren't you. And you're controlling my pouch through your bending." She stated as the man nodded.

    "You are correct. You know, I've been watching you fight and I must say, your skill, creativity, and utter ruthlessness is very impressive. Especially for a young lady at you're age.", He said, pacing around in front of her.

    "So what are you saying?", Ariel asked, thinking of a way to attack him.

    "Join us, and you could reach you're true potential. Staying with this little group of 'wannabe heroes', will only lessen your chances for reaching your true destiny of greatness. Along with me, you could rise to be one of the greatest waterbenders ever!", He said, emitting an evil laugh afterwards. Ariel rolled her eyes and sighed 'Great, now I'm being held hostage by a nutcase waterbender who is hell bent on ruling the world. Ugh, what did I do to deserve this." Ariel thought as he continued to laugh. She then ripped her pouch from off her and summoned water from the grass under them and hit him in the stomach with a jet of water.

    "So, you must be declining my generous offer of ruling the world. No matter, I will just knock some sense into you so you can reconsider", he stated as he slashed a whip towards her head. She ducked and then jumped up, launching major water blasts towrads them man's head. He deflected all of the blasts and made them into one huge wall of water in front him. He then punched the wall and balls of ice erupted, flying towards her. She dodged majority of them, until her dead in the stomach, the force making her fall on her back. Then, water came from the ground and wrapped itself aroung her limbs, tying her to the ground. He laughed as he watched her struggled on the ground.

    "Now this is a compromising position, isn't it", he laughed as he advanced upon her. He lowered his body till it was parallel to hers. Ariel glared him, her anger rising.

    "Pervert", she yelled as he got closer towards her.

    "What did you say?" He said as his face got closer to hers. She drew in her breath and as soon as face was close enough, she breathed into his face, her breath full small, sharp pieces of ice. He yelped as some pieces went into his eye. Ariel capitalized on his momentary weakness and broke out of the water that was holding her. She kicked him off of her and stood up, clenching her fist as she waited for him to rise.

    '"You're gonna pay for that lil' girl", he said, anger in his voice. He rushed towards her and and tried to strike her with with a quick wave of water but he missed as she dodged the move and he was hit in the side by a blade of ice. He looked down in horror as he saw his side was bleeding furiously. The ropes of water appeared from under him and bound him to the ground, just as he had done to her.

    "Well, well. Look what we have here. A wannabe ruler of the world, when really he's nothing but a freaking pawn. I mean come on, how do plan to rule the world when you follow under a guy who's doing a job for another guy and so on and so forth. I mean you want to play with the big dogs when you don't have your own group under you. Pathetic. And as the person who I probably hate the most would say, 'True rulers are born. They alone the divine right to conquer. ' So in other words, you had no chance. In fact, you wasn't even a pawn, just a sideliner who decided to try and join in the fun, but gets killed in the process of trying to be something you're not. So now it's time to say goodbye, idiot." She said as a whip of water wrapped around his neck. It strangled the man until he died and his body went limp. Before he died howeved, a sharp blade of water slashed his groin area.

    "That's for trying to rape me, pervert". She spat as she walked away from the body.

    Edited on 06/21/2008 12:09pm
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    Double09nhalf

    [7516]Jun 20, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:

    Ok, this is my criticizing post. I read TLG's, The Second Sign's, and Redemption's posts.

    I thought TLG's post was good. I like how he made the conflict within Willy, because he has difficulty choosing sides...I don't know, it was just good following his last post.

    The Second Sign's post was impressive. I'm starting to get used to the idea of his story. Meeting his insane brother was better when I read it, because there was room for compromise even though it seemed like there would be regret instead. The arguements and conversations, along with detail were also entertaining.

    Redemption's post was confusing. I'm not going to lie, but what is the "Dark Aura" or "black Aura" thing you've got there? I can sense the drama, but I'm not comprehending "giving into the darkness". Sounds a bit like kingdom hearts...

    Airbending fueled by hatred sounds like my post a couple of days ago...

    meh, whatever i liked the post good job

    By the way, have you ever watched Samurai Champloo- Genesis reminds me of the one who wears glasses

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    Double09nhalf

    [7517]Jun 20, 2008
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    Lord-darkboy wrote:
    r3173mpt10n wrote:

    Sorry for that confusion Dafoose. I didn't really specify it, but I did now or I'll justsay it in this post.

    Firebender + Hatred = Genesis + Hatred

    Firebender + Hatred = Firebending

    Genesis + Hatred = Aura Thingy

    Firebending = Aura Thingy

    I think I got my math right. That's kind of what I meant....

    hmm

    so Genesis + Hatred + Firebending = 2Aura Thingies

    How about we make it even simplier:

    If bob goes to hate town with firebending...

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    Double09nhalf

    [7518]Jun 20, 2008
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    Dafoose wrote:
    I think that's another good one, second sign.

    I been catching up myself and i liked the post as well

    very entertaining

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    Double09nhalf

    [7519]Jun 21, 2008
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    And for my last trick...

    ///////////////

    Siam- airbender

    Mizuhiro- firebender/swordsman

    Master Ikasoruk- master swordsman

    kempa- flying bision

    ~~currently flying in the Northwest reion of the earth kingdom

    ///////////////////////

    Siam and team had flown for almost a day in the Northwestern territory of the Earth kingdom searching for the Western Air-Temple. But with it still not in sight some of the passengers began to get irritated.

    "Where is the stupid temple anyway?" complained Mizuhiro.

    Siam too was getting irritated but it was because of all his complaining.

    "Do I have to tell you the history lesson another time? When Chin the Conqueror tried to overpower what is now the Kyoshi Island Avatar Kyoshi split the peninsula from the main land. She did this to separate from the main land but the second effect of this is that it also shifted the mainland a noticeable amount."

    Mizuhiro started to scratch his head.

    "So you're saying that the individual temples aren't true East or North?"

    "Actually the Northern Air-Temple is almost perfect because it's really magnetic north now. And yes the temples got moved a couple degree's off but it's..."

    Kempa started growling softly suddenly and started bobbing his head.

    "What is it Kempa? Do you smell something... you mean we're there?"

    Siam started to get excited. She got out her staff and jumped onto Kempa's head and looked him in the eye.

    "I'm going okay," she winked, "You know what to do."

    She then climbed back onto the saddle.

    "Kempa's going to follow me. You guys had better hang on."

    Siam walked to the edge of the saddle and turned around with her back to the edge. Mizuhiro looked at her, even more confused.

    "What do you mean(hang on)."

    Siam just winked at him then she fell backward through the clouds. Mizuhiro ran to the edge of the saddle and watched as her free fall through the clouds.

    "SIAM!!!"

    He tried to look for her but the fluffy cumuli were too thick. He would have continued to search for her if Master Ikasoruk hadn't called to him.

    "Mizuhiro, I suggest you do what Siam suggested and hold on."

    Mizuhiro turned and looked at him funny.

    "Whaaaaaaaaaat?!?"

    As Kempa fell in a downward spiral Mizuhiro was sure he'd left his stomach (Not to mention his lunch) a mile above his current position.

    Meanwhile Siam was still free falling backwards. She tucked one hand in and extended the other to rotate her body until she was facing downward. As she peered through the white fluff she closed her eyes and thought of her father.

    ~~~~~~

    Flashback...

    Her had father had taken her flying one day when the weather was warm and the sun shining. She still afraid of heights so they had to fly very low to the ground. He took Siam to a grassy mountain that ended in a cliff on the other side. They landed at the top and sat down to eat lunch. Her father pointed toward the cliffs edge and between mouths fulls spoke to her.

    "That over there is the exact spot I proposed to your mother. It was on a day much like this one except for the fact that it was spring and the wind was coming from the southeast I believe... or was it the southwest?"

    Siam ran over to the edge and cringed when she looked down.

    "Father, it's very far down."

    Her father looked down upon at her and smiled. Then he grabbed his staff and walked toward the edge.

    "You have to trust the air and it won't fail you," he said.

    And with staff in hand he leapt off the cliff. Siam ran to the edge but didn't see him at all.

    "FATHER!"

    Siam eyes started to tear up but as she was about to cry a violent gust blew up at her face.

    "You miss me already?"

    She turned around to see him lying in the grass with his hands behind his head. Siam ran over to her father and jumped on his chest knocking the air out of him.

    "Don't ever do that again," She said as she started to cry.

    Airbending wind around his finger her dad wiped away her tears.

    "All you have to do is trust the air and it won't let you down," he said smiling.

    End flashback...

    ~~~~~~

    Trust the wind, she thought.

    Filled with bliss Siam opened her eyes and tucked her arms to her sides causing her to surge down even faster.

    (Cue music)*

    As she burst through the bottom of the cloud Siam saw hundreds of gliders of all colors flying together. As she entered the masses of gliders she got her staff out and whipped it in front of her. As she twirled it below her the glider opened up and she sailed on top of it. Some of the other airbenders started to weave and bob as they lost focus on their flying while paying attention to her. Siam dodged pass some and looped pass others until she came to a stop at the western airtemple.

    ///////////////////////

    I hope you like it

    Tell me what you thunk

    * actuall music begins a 00:35

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    r3173mpt10n

    [7520]Jun 21, 2008
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    Double09nhalf wrote:
    Dafoose wrote:

    Ok, this is my criticizing post. I read TLG's, The Second Sign's, and Redemption's posts.

    I thought TLG's post was good. I like how he made the conflict within Willy, because he has difficulty choosing sides...I don't know, it was just good following his last post.

    The Second Sign's post was impressive. I'm starting to get used to the idea of his story. Meeting his insane brother was better when I read it, because there was room for compromise even though it seemed like there would be regret instead. The arguements and conversations, along with detail were also entertaining.

    Redemption's post was confusing. I'm not going to lie, but what is the "Dark Aura" or "black Aura" thing you've got there? I can sense the drama, but I'm not comprehending "giving into the darkness". Sounds a bit like kingdom hearts...

    Airbending fueled by hatred sounds like my post a couple of days ago...

    meh, whatever i liked the post good job

    By the way, have you ever watched Samurai Champloo- Genesis reminds me of the one who wears glasses

    Gin? Haha I guess. What's the other guys name? Oh....Mugen.
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